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TrueStranger · **Untitled -** 10-11-2008

It looks like it is the poem season....

Life has rendered me senseless

Kept me chained and shackled in darkness

In the midst of sorrow I profess my weakness

To a world completed deprived of kindness

Even the blind see the everlasting wickedness

Of Cold Hearts molded by the hands of the ageless

Through forgotten memories I’m able find forgiveness

As I stood alone they think I am fearless

But standing on the verge of the cliff I feel careless

Soon I shall be walking among the faceless

I time of mine has came to past to make me of the heartless

Don't judge me harshly

**Jawharah** · **Re: Untitled -** 10-11-2008

We wouldn't be harsh, specially me cuz I can't even do poetry. Anyways it's cool! I like how it all ends with 'ess.

TrueStranger · **Re: Untitled -** 10-11-2008

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Originally Posted by Jawharah

We wouldn't be harsh, specially me cuz I can't even do poetry. Anyways it's cool! I like how it all ends with 'ess.

Thanks

We have something in common. Poems need to be constructed in a profoundily flowing manner, but i just abuse that rule.

Thanks

Umm Turaab

Wow masha'Allah sis!

TrueStranger

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Originally Posted by JolieFleur

Wow masha'Allah sis!

really

Thanks

Umm Turaab

It was fab sis! Masha'Allah

Haron♥Islam

Me like it

Jazakallahu Khairan!

Sahabiyaat

totally absolutely fantastic.loved it

TrueStranger

Thanks bro Haron and sis Sahabiyaat

I thought my whole existence was to massacre the beauty of poetry.

Sahabiyaat

no way girl, you are fab

do u want to explain the meaning

the meaning i derived was 'joining the faceless masses' , being mislead and being very aware of it and being afraid. thats the meaning i took anyway lol

i always take my own meanings out of poems and how i percieve them.

Sahabiyaat

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In the midst of sorrow I profess my weakness

losing emaan

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Even the blind see the everlasting wickedness

Of Cold Hearts molded by the hands of the ageless

the ageless>> devils

??

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Soon I shall be walking among the faceless

I time of mine has came to past to make me of the heartless

becoming amongst the heedless.

thats my interpretation

TrueStranger

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Originally Posted by Sahabiyaat

no way girl, you are fab

do u want to explain the meaning

the meaning i derived was 'joining the faceless masses' , being mislead and being very aware of it and being afraid. thats the meaning i took anyway lol

i always take my own meanings out of poems and how i percieve them.

lol You are close

My first line was "Love has rendered me senseless" but i changed it to life I don't know why

but the last line kinda gives it away I time of mine has came to past to make me of the heartless

Hope that helps

TrueStranger

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Originally Posted by Sahabiyaat

losing emaan

true

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the ageless>> devils

??

It's always Mr. Shatan who molds cold hearts.

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becoming amongst the heedless.

The faceless are those who are dead inside

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thats my interpretation

I like how we all interpret the same words differently.

sis

**Muslimah421**

wow amazing wallah! i loooved it sis

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TrueStranger SOLO Status: Offline Posts: 444 Reputation: 2593 Rep Power: 7 Join Date: Apr 2008 Way of Life: Undisclosed	Untitled - 10-11-2008 It looks like it is the poem season.... Life has rendered me senseless Kept me chained and shackled in darkness In the midst of sorrow I profess my weakness To a world completed deprived of kindness Even the blind see the everlasting wickedness Of Cold Hearts molded by the hands of the ageless Through forgotten memories I’m able find forgiveness As I stood alone they think I am fearless But standing on the verge of the cliff I feel careless Soon I shall be walking among the faceless I time of mine has came to past to make me of the heartless Don't judge me harshly

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Jawharah LI's Fishter Status: Offline Posts: 5,165 Reputation: 35594 Rep Power: 72 Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Along the Coast Gender: Way of Life: Muslim	Re: Untitled - 10-11-2008 We wouldn't be harsh, specially me cuz I can't even do poetry. Anyways it's cool! I like how it all ends with 'ess. __________________ Watch your eye, should it ever reveal to you the faults of others, say to it: “O my eye, other people have eyes too.” [Ahmad al Zarruq]

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Umm Turaab Account Disabled Status: Offline Posts: 9,656 Reputation: 27470 Rep Power: 0 Join Date: Jul 2005 Gender: Way of Life: Muslim	Re: Untitled - 4 Weeks Ago Wow masha'Allah sis!

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Umm Turaab Account Disabled Status: Offline Posts: 9,656 Reputation: 27470 Rep Power: 0 Join Date: Jul 2005 Gender: Way of Life: Muslim	Re: Untitled - 4 Weeks Ago It was fab sis! Masha'Allah

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Haron♥Islam Limited Member Status: Offline Posts: 36 Reputation: 135 Rep Power: 0 Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: San Diego CA, USA Gender: Way of Life: Muslim	Re: Untitled - 4 Weeks Ago Me like it Jazakallahu Khairan!

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Sahabiyaat AllpraiseistoAllah Status: Offline Posts: 1,576 Reputation: 5872 Rep Power: 32 Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: in a universe..in a galaxy...on a planet in a country in a state in AN area in a house in a room:) Gender: Way of Life: Undisclosed	Re: Untitled - 4 Weeks Ago totally absolutely fantastic.loved it __________________ kahin toh,... hogi woh, duniya jahan tu mere saath hai ..jaane na kahan woh duniya hai jaane na woh hai ya nahin jahan meri zindagi muj se itni hafa nahin

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TrueStranger SOLO Status: Offline Posts: 444 Reputation: 2593 Rep Power: 7 Join Date: Apr 2008 Way of Life: Undisclosed	Re: Untitled - 4 Weeks Ago Thanks bro Haron and sis Sahabiyaat I thought my whole existence was to massacre the beauty of poetry. __________________ *It seems like within the dark realms of life a mind trapped in the sub-conscious of a lost soul speaks out only to be silenced.*

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Sahabiyaat AllpraiseistoAllah Status: Offline Posts: 1,576 Reputation: 5872 Rep Power: 32 Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: in a universe..in a galaxy...on a planet in a country in a state in AN area in a house in a room:) Gender: Way of Life: Undisclosed	Re: Untitled - 4 Weeks Ago no way girl, you are fab do u want to explain the meaning the meaning i derived was 'joining the faceless masses' , being mislead and being very aware of it and being afraid. thats the meaning i took anyway lol i always take my own meanings out of poems and how i percieve them. __________________ kahin toh,... hogi woh, duniya jahan tu mere saath hai ..jaane na kahan woh duniya hai jaane na woh hai ya nahin jahan meri zindagi muj se itni hafa nahin

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Muslimah421 ..::.. Romeo ..::.. Status: Offline Posts: 4,245 Reputation: 17840 Rep Power: 41 Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Portland OR USA Gender: Way of Life: Muslim	Re: Untitled - 4 Weeks Ago wow amazing wallah! i loooved it sis __________________ * Cherished Jewels * ^ Updated ^