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truemuslim
02-13-2008, 12:26 AM
:sl:

here is the free style i wrote last night while i was being bored... just read it and tell me watu think...

Its goin down toniite
hang on if u like
showin u how i do
wit all the lines i move
now check it...

we the the slaves of allah 24 nonstop
in the deen never come to a full stop
u listenen to the american hip hop
u car is down u spendin $ at the car shop
u remember to pick up the things fo yo pop
gettin a flat tire u like 'oh no'
so u call ur frend and say 'aiyo'
thinkin its all u need yet u still way low
watr u missin? u forgot the great pro
you still down way below
this is something u gotta know
remember ur lord
u'll getta great reward
dont let him be ignored
he is the one and only, the great lord
u aint got time to wait
time is runnin out dont be late
the scale is gainin more and more wieght
u aint realizin u the shaitans bait
dont turn away keep lookin straight
keep balancing dont fall off the line
listen to the truth and dont decline
u'll be fine
i kno u'll shine


and this is the other one

look at how we livin
everywhere we look racism
terrorism
hatin on the muslims
some guy who got shot
young guy left to rot
lady who got robbed
some guys who got stopped
open the paper in search and enlighment
met up bya story of hate and encitement
half the storys in the paper bout us
its just me?
yet again the talks bout me
no matter what i do, u just cant set ur mind free


and the lastest one

i see, worlds in misery
i feel, all my enemies
are here, the battle never dies and i fear
u'll fly away leavin me here
more sufferin to come ahead
i see ppl comin over fightin over a piece of dry bread
bullets spread
dozens dead
whats next?
the worlds hexed
time to wise up like unicef
you and i
ment to be, meant to see
rest of time, rest of life
the time moves on with all the light
they say times a great healer
but i see time passes by like a great stealer
i see the worlds most beautiful landscapes
growin up on landmines
life of another child
fallin down fo shaitan
folks fallin down like domino
1 after 1, either lose a leg or a son
an endless marathon
juss keeps goin on and on...



so?

:w:
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truemuslim
02-13-2008, 04:13 PM
they really short i kno but i mite be addin some more... bout islam, bout arabs, bout terrorism, bout racism...all that...yeah :w:
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02-13-2008, 04:14 PM
:salamext:

Mashaa Allaah, real kool. Keep it up sis :thumbs_up
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Cabdullahi
02-13-2008, 04:16 PM
sister they are absolutely shocking what utter ............utter brilliance lol keep it up sis lol :0
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truemuslim
02-13-2008, 04:29 PM
oh lol yay they good... more comin after school...




i think
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rabarbara2008
02-13-2008, 04:32 PM
I like it sis :)
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IbnAbdulHakim
02-13-2008, 04:36 PM
i got one thing to say

Why Are You Not On The Rhymes Thread More Often?!
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truemuslim
02-13-2008, 04:37 PM
lol i gots a poetry thing to do for school and im allowed to do ANY subject in the WORLD...

hehe islam, racism, terrorism... my new subject.. its not due yet thol... i still got like a week so i shudnt need to start it i got pleeeenty of time
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02-13-2008, 04:37 PM
:salamext:

Innit bro^ lol..
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truemuslim
02-13-2008, 04:38 PM
Originally Posted by IbnAbdulHakim
i got one thing to say

Why Are You Not On The Rhymes Thread More Often?!

actually im not on LI more often lol. school...school...schooll...sneakin LI.. so i gotta go now
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The Ruler
02-13-2008, 04:38 PM
:sl:

I'm not familiar the words: "fo yo pop" and "aiyo". Though I like some of you lines, the rhyming and the slang is slightly annoying. Nonetheless, Good job.

:w:
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02-13-2008, 04:40 PM
:salamext:

"fo yo pop" - for your dad

"aiyo" - hey, yo
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truemuslim
02-13-2008, 04:41 PM
lol u r hilarius.. both u sisters
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The Ruler
02-13-2008, 04:45 PM
:sl:

Need help:

open the paper in search and enlighment
met up bya story of hate and encitement
half the storys in the paper bout us
its just me?
yet again the talks bout me
no matter what i do, u just cant set ur mind free
Plagiarism?

i see, worlds in misery
i feel, all my enemies
are here, the battle never dies and i fear
u'll fly away leavin me here
:w:
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02-13-2008, 04:46 PM
:salamext:

^ Sorry?
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truemuslim
02-13-2008, 04:47 PM
huh?
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The Ruler
02-13-2008, 04:48 PM
Originally Posted by AhLÄÄM
:salamext:

^ Sorry?
I couldn't understand the meaning of the first quote and thought the second quote seemed too much like a song by Outlandish.
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truemuslim
02-13-2008, 04:49 PM
omg sis thanks for bringing it back LOL i swear i had those last ones in my head and cudnt remember where i got it from a show or me or a song or what lol jazakallah that song is ancient... cant remember which tho
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IbnAbdulHakim
02-13-2008, 04:53 PM
to be honest most rhymes are inspired by what we heard one time i guess...

like one which keeps comin bak to me is:

i see the light at the end
but everytime i take a step it gets dim
tell me is this hell we livin in
is so heavens gotta be betta but if we hellbound wateva lets go down...


audhubillah, we dnt wanna go down but the lyrics are deep. they might affect our rhymes so its not plagiarism.


Assalamu Alaikum
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truemuslim
02-13-2008, 04:55 PM
^ yeah i guess... they just stay in ur mind and they the first thing that come to u wen u do it... those are amazing lyrics where they from? :w:
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jzcasejz
02-13-2008, 04:55 PM
Originally Posted by IbnAbdulHakim
i see the light at the end
but everytime i take a step it gets dim
tell me is this hell we livin in
is so heavens gotta be betta but if we hellbound wateva lets go down...
Ahhhh, sick man!!! That was a tune!!!!!!!!!!! :eek:
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02-13-2008, 04:55 PM
:salamext:

^ That from a rap or something? Never heard of it lol.
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IbnAbdulHakim
02-13-2008, 04:56 PM
im not gnna say where its from, its from a bad past

Assalamu Alaikum
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truemuslim
02-13-2008, 04:56 PM
omg is that one of tupacs? jw
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jzcasejz
02-13-2008, 04:57 PM
Originally Posted by AhLÄÄM
^ That from a rap or something? Never heard of it lol.
Lol yeah, it's quite an old song...
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Cabdullahi
02-13-2008, 04:58 PM
I havent listened to any sort of music for a while so im abit lost??
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IbnAbdulHakim
02-13-2008, 04:58 PM
Originally Posted by truemuslim
omg is that one of tupacs? jw
nope


Assalamu Alaikum


carry on with the on-topic
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truemuslim
02-13-2008, 04:59 PM
Originally Posted by Ahmedjunior
I havent listened to any sort of music for a while so im abit lost??
lol

Originally Posted by IbnAbdulHakim
nope


Assalamu Alaikum


carry on with the on-topic
ok
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Cabdullahi
02-13-2008, 05:01 PM
Originally Posted by truemuslim
lol



ok
u think its funny eh?:cry::mad:
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IbnAbdulHakim
02-13-2008, 05:01 PM
Originally Posted by Ahmedjunior
u think its funny eh?:cry::mad:
but i think its really good

mashaAllaah keep it up :) !
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The Ruler
02-13-2008, 05:02 PM
Originally Posted by IbnAbdulHakim
to be honest most rhymes are inspired by what we heard one time i guess...
That is an opinion.

Originally Posted by http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/plagiarism
Plagiarism:

the unauthorized use or close imitation of the language and thoughts of another author and the representation of them as one's own original work.
Intentions are irrelevant.
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IbnAbdulHakim
02-13-2008, 05:03 PM
Originally Posted by Liúyú de Lian
That is an opinion.



Intentions are irrelevant.
in that case im sure you've unintentionally and unknowingly plagiarised millions of things.
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truemuslim
02-13-2008, 05:07 PM
Originally Posted by Ahmedjunior
u think its funny eh?:cry::mad:

wait.. u werent jokin?

lol my bad...:nervous:
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The Ruler
02-13-2008, 05:12 PM
Originally Posted by IbnAbdulHakim
in that case im sure you've unintentionally and unknowingly plagiarised millions of things.
If you mean every word I'm typing right now, then ofcourse!

Originally Posted by trumuslimah
omg sis thanks for bringing it back LOL i swear i had those last ones in my head and cudnt remember where i got it from a show or me or a song or what lol jazakallah that song is ancient... cant remember which tho
^That's what she said. It suggests that, although vaguely, she was aware of the words being from somewhere else.

:w:
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truemuslim
02-13-2008, 05:15 PM
Originally Posted by Liúyú de Lian
If you mean every word I'm typing right now, then ofcourse!



^That's what she said. It suggests that, although vaguely, she was aware of the words being from somewhere else.

:w:
lol no i said it MIGHT have been cuz i have wrote alot of other things and it cudv been from them...
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The Ruler
02-13-2008, 05:22 PM
^You mentioned "song" and "show"

Cheh. I feel like I'm defending a client.

:w:
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truemuslim
02-13-2008, 05:26 PM
from a show or me or a song
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The Ruler
02-13-2008, 05:33 PM
Originally Posted by truemuslim
from a show or me or a song
I was aware of the 'me'. but even so, it is at a ratio of 1:2 i.e. one 'me' to two 'song' and 'show'. Which only further adds to my... Point of Plagiarism.

:w:
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truemuslim
02-13-2008, 05:38 PM
fine... me me me or me me mem me me or meme me or i think it was me... waait now i remember it was i yeah thats right i yeah no me i think no im pretty sure it was myself seiiously... or a a show or a song...??? ur kiddin me rigt?

ok watevr lets just not get off topic sis :w:
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The Ruler
02-13-2008, 05:49 PM
fine... me me me or me me mem me me or meme me or i think it was me... waait now i remember it was i yeah thats right i yeah no me i think no im pretty sure it was myself seiiously... or a a show or a song...??? ur kiddin me rigt?
I smell nutty-ness.

Geh. Then, will you kindly enlighten me with the meaning behind the following words of yours?

open the paper in search and enlighment
met up bya story of hate and encitement
half the storys in the paper bout us
its just me?
yet again the talks bout me
no matter what i do, u just cant set ur mind free
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truemuslim
02-13-2008, 06:00 PM
lol sis.

translation:
i go lookin in the paper hopin to find good stuff
but then i just see things hatin on islam and arabs and muslims and all
half of the storys in the paper are aout us (muslims and arabs or 'terrorists')
just me (the arab or muslim)
yet again its bout me
and no matter what i do u cant set ur mind free from hatin on islam and muslims...and arabs

get it?
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Souljette
02-13-2008, 06:26 PM
TRUEE MUSLIM REALLL GOOODDD FREE STYLE KEEP IT UP mashallah
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Mr. Baldy
02-13-2008, 06:47 PM
salam sis, your good mashallah, you need to work on your flow some.
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Umar001
02-13-2008, 06:58 PM
As Salaam Alaykum,

It is hard to freestyle, meaning rhyme words of the top (meaning without having it planned) and not be influenced by something you had heard, wether music, a'udhobillah, or qur'anic verses. All that needed to be said was 'sister it seems like you have let what you have heard become part of your rhyming' lets be nice to each other :)

Anyhow, I think it's best not to have such a thread as its just allowing shaytan to come back into our heads. I can imagine people disagreeing with me right now, so let me place my reasoning forth:


1. Those who feel they have kicked the habit of listening to music might be right, talking about it might not make them go back, but they are still disclosing something which should in honesty kinda be hidden right?


2. And even though those strong enough are not going to be going back to sinning, some of us are not that strong and so what is effectivly happening is people showing off a drink to an addict for lack of better terms, sometimes all it takes is to come to here and see that people listened to music etc, and although not right, it does effect some and shaytan uses that, or so it seems.

It could even be an avtar which make some remember the 'good' old days. hint hint ;)

Yall still disagree?

Eesa.
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truemuslim
02-13-2008, 07:27 PM
lol werent u banned bro? anyway actually it was ONLY the 'i feel misery' and all that part that was from remembering other stuff.. otherwise i made up the rest ON THE SPOT so it is freestyle i never have em planned its boring...
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Moon*Light
02-13-2008, 07:31 PM
:sl:

Sis I don't know what to say, they are wonderful especially the last one.

Thanks for sharing and keep it up! :)
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truemuslim
02-13-2008, 10:25 PM
Originally Posted by Mr. Baldy
salam sis, your good mashallah, you need to work on your flow some.

jazakallah bro... whado u suggest?
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Mr. Baldy
02-15-2008, 06:31 PM
Originally Posted by truemuslim
jazakallah bro... whado u suggest?
ok for example lets take this line

'you still down way below
this is something u gotta know
remember ur lord
u'll getta great reward'


you could change it to

'your still way too down below,
this is something you gotta know,
you better remember your lord,
you'll get greater reward'

see, now the syllables rhyme to, and the flow is much better. do you get what im saying?
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truemuslim
02-15-2008, 06:33 PM
ah yeah thats better... much better...jazakallah.. i will need that
:w:

p.s. ur rhymes are amaaazing in ur thread
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Mr. Baldy
02-15-2008, 07:08 PM
Originally Posted by truemuslim
ah yeah thats better... much better...jazakallah.. i will need that
:w:

p.s. ur rhymes are amaaazing in ur thread
barakallah fee, beauty is in the eye of the beholder. your rhymes are amazing as well.
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Uthman
02-15-2008, 07:18 PM
I think they're brilliant. :)

Mashaa'Allah not only do you have talent, but you are using it for the right purpose!
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truemuslim
02-15-2008, 07:37 PM
lol jazakallah... ima write one bout war and do it for my school poem thing and i better getta 100% lol.. comin up
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Mr. Baldy
02-15-2008, 07:45 PM
Originally Posted by truemuslim
lol jazakallah... ima write one bout war and do it for my school poem thing and i better getta 100% lol.. comin up
if you need any help, just holler
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truemuslim
02-15-2008, 07:47 PM
ok jazakallah
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