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TrueStranger
10-11-2008, 05:15 AM
It looks like it is the poem season....:D
Life has rendered me senseless
Kept me chained and shackled in darkness
In the midst of sorrow I profess my weakness
To a world completed deprived of kindness
Even the blind see the everlasting wickedness
Of Cold Hearts molded by the hands of the ageless
Through forgotten memories I’m able find forgiveness
As I stood alone they think I am fearless
But standing on the verge of the cliff I feel careless
Soon I shall be walking among the faceless
I time of mine has came to past to make me of the heartless
Don't judge me harshly :scared:
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BlissfullyJaded
10-11-2008, 05:23 AM
:sl:
We wouldn't be harsh, specially me cuz I can't even do poetry. Anyways it's cool! I like how it all ends with 'ess. :thumbs_up
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TrueStranger
10-11-2008, 05:30 AM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Jawharah
:sl:
We wouldn't be harsh, specially me cuz I can't even do poetry. Anyways it's cool! I like how it all ends with 'ess. :thumbs_up
:w:
Thanks
We have something in common. Poems need to be constructed in a profoundily flowing manner, but i just abuse that rule.
Thanks
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Re.TiReD
10-20-2008, 02:14 PM
Wow masha'Allah sis! :ooh:
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TrueStranger
10-20-2008, 02:24 PM
format_quote Originally Posted by
JolieFleur
Wow masha'Allah sis! :ooh:
:uuh: really :uuh: Thanks
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Re.TiReD
10-20-2008, 02:24 PM
It was fab sis! Masha'Allah :)
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Haron♥Islam
10-20-2008, 02:27 PM
Me like it :D Jazakallahu Khairan!
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Sahabiyaat
10-20-2008, 02:28 PM
totally absolutely fantastic.loved it :)
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TrueStranger
10-20-2008, 02:30 PM
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Thanks bro Haron and sis Sahabiyaat
I thought my whole existence was to massacre the beauty of poetry. :-[
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Sahabiyaat
10-20-2008, 02:35 PM
no way girl, you are fab
do u want to explain the meaning
the meaning i derived was 'joining the faceless masses' , being mislead and being very aware of it and being afraid. thats the meaning i took anyway lol :) i always take my own meanings out of poems and how i percieve them.
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Sahabiyaat
10-20-2008, 02:38 PM
In the midst of sorrow I profess my weakness
losing emaan
Even the blind see the everlasting wickedness
Of Cold Hearts molded by the hands of the ageless
the ageless>> devils :uuh:??
Soon I shall be walking among the faceless
I time of mine has came to past to make me of the heartless
becoming amongst the heedless.
thats my interpretation :)
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TrueStranger
10-20-2008, 02:42 PM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Sahabiyaat
no way girl, you are fab
do u want to explain the meaning
the meaning i derived was 'joining the faceless masses' , being mislead and being very aware of it and being afraid. thats the meaning i took anyway lol :) i always take my own meanings out of poems and how i percieve them.
lol You are close
My first line was
"Love has rendered me senseless" but i changed it to
life I don't know why :blind:
but the last line kinda gives it away
I time of mine has came to past to make me of the heartless
Hope that helps
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TrueStranger
10-20-2008, 02:48 PM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Sahabiyaat
losing emaan
true
the ageless>> devils :uuh:??
It's always Mr. Shatan who molds cold hearts. :raging:
becoming amongst the heedless.
The faceless are those who are dead inside
thats my interpretation :)
I like how we all interpret the same words differently. :thankyou: sis
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Na7lah
10-20-2008, 08:39 PM
wow amazing wallah! i loooved it sis :D :thumbs_up
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