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Snowflake
10-15-2008, 09:07 AM
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As He wills
finally.. after a time
two lonely tears
broke free from my eyes
i'd been sitting in a gathering
people laughing and chatting
I remember someone had spoken to me
from the other side of the room
but i wasn't really there
for in that moment in time
my gaze had frozen upon the wall
i wasn't looking at anything
for my eyes had turned to stone
it was you I was thinking
and you I was seeing
a memory had gripped my heart
its cruel fingers clenching hard
until two lonely tears
had escaped my eyes
it had been an age since i'd cried
and still as a statue i stayed
the company, the atmosphere
never took my attention
if anything...
it only heightened your absence
made me miss you more
memories... memories
thank you for leaving those
a distant voice of long ago
echoes through my mind
forever... forever you will live
in a secret place inside
but... but...
this loss i have accepted
as being the will of God
for I know Allah knows best
the Guardian of my heart
:cry:
:w:
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Cabdullahi
10-15-2008, 09:09 AM
Now that's what i call a poem
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Re.TiReD
10-15-2008, 09:09 AM
SubhanAllah.
That was amazing sis
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Snowflake
10-15-2008, 09:25 AM
*gulp* thank you very much both
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Re.TiReD
10-15-2008, 09:32 AM
[MOUSE]vee vant more :D[/MOUSE]
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Snowflake
10-15-2008, 09:56 AM
^lol
more later inshaAllah
*goes for brekki*
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IbnAbdulHakim
10-15-2008, 10:02 AM
mashaAllaah
it expresses your feelings clearly
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10-15-2008, 11:24 AM
:salamext:
mashaAllaah that was amazing! u rock sis! :D
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Snowflake
10-15-2008, 01:55 PM
:sl:
Forever
on a fragranced path, through the trees
she runs barefooted like the breeze
delicate pink blossom crush underfoot
softening the sound of the owl's hoot
petals whip up by the silken garb
fingers tighten on her precious hijab
on and on she runs toward the dazzling light
where love would be requited forever tonight
and there beside the shimmering lake
she sees the place where he had prayed
her loving gaze caresses the mark of sujood
where the pleasure of Allah he had pursued
he'd died before she'd become his bride
on their wedding day, he was shrouded in white
no final words, no goodbyes, no nothing
just earth preparing herself for his coming
she knows he'd have wanted her to be strong
to accept what Allah had willed and do no wrong
soft sobs break the still air and she cries
O Allah let us be together in Paradise!
she stands to go.. a determined look upon her face
not noticing her heart has started to race
suddenly she sinks to the ground, so cold and bare
a ghostly mist of breath escapes into the still air
(p.s. jus made minor changes but left interpretation open inshaAllah)
*gulp* :X:cry:
:w:
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IbnAbdulHakim
10-15-2008, 02:05 PM
^ WOW!!!! :|...
i dont think ive been so gripped by a poem EVER!... seriously sis u shudad seen me i was ilke this :uuh: <--- whilst reading it, mashaAllaah so beautiful and vivid!
wow...
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Snowflake
10-15-2008, 03:57 PM
^lol jazakAllahu khayr bro.. that seriously was a nice comment. If you could've seen me when I was writing it, you would've dialled 999 :exhausted
thanks Ahlaam sis <3
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10-15-2008, 04:03 PM
format_quote Originally Posted by
IbnAbdulHakim
^ WOW!!!! :|...
i dont think ive been so gripped by a poem EVER!... seriously sis u shudad seen me i was ilke this :uuh: <--- whilst reading it, mashaAllaah so beautiful and vivid!
wow...
:salamext:
SNAP!!! :D Subhaan Allaah :muddlehea
You should take over from me sis :D [not that am showing off] :p
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Snowflake
10-15-2008, 04:13 PM
format_quote Originally Posted by
AhLÄÄM
:salamext:
SNAP!!! :D Subhaan Allaah :muddlehea
You should take over from me sis :D [not that am showing off] :p
thanks, i think i have :coolious:
lololol kidding sis :laugh: u r my ustaadni & plz put your poems up :D
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DaNgErOuS MiNdS
10-15-2008, 08:11 PM
amazing masha'Allah, really deep....keep them coming.
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Snowflake
10-15-2008, 08:18 PM
thanks bro! :)
alhumdulillah :cry:
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Nσσя'υℓ Jαииαн
10-15-2008, 09:36 PM
:O:O:O! OMG. mashAllah sis, so beautiful..ive read ur first one but the second! omg. lovely.
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IbnAbdulHakim
10-15-2008, 09:37 PM
^ i must agree to the comment above!
*nods head*
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Re.TiReD
10-15-2008, 09:41 PM
I.....is lost for words
Seriously, the images were....Rabeee! I just loved it sis...if you had entered the poetry contest you wudda won hands down :ooh: please stay tuned for the next contest insha'Allah
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Ibn Abi Ahmed
10-15-2008, 09:53 PM
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Very deep poems with such excellent imagery! I wanted to pick out which part of the poems I thought were deepest..but I couldn't because all of it is just so profound. Just have to say, please continue to write more and share with us.
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IbnAbdulHakim
10-15-2008, 09:57 PM
^ bro you have no idea how many times i read that second poem
it is soooo amazingly beyond words.... i feel like printing it out and adding it in a private collection in which it may remain the only poem for a long time due to its level of depth :|
hmm i still might though :)
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Snowflake
10-15-2008, 10:06 PM
lololol omg guys.. im chuffed, shy, shocked all at once lol tnx for liking :-[:D
btw, is it obvious that the girl in the second poem dies? :?
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Snowflake
10-15-2008, 10:10 PM
subhanAllah, i just noticed the new replies.. thank you so much everyone. I will def continue to write inshaAllah :)
bro you have no idea how many times i read that second poem
mashaAllah lol.. and i feel ashamed to admit that i've been doing it to.. lol thats sad
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IbnAbdulHakim
10-15-2008, 10:11 PM
^ no its not that obvious lol, but its an interpretation
or you can interpret that she just fell down :-[
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Re.TiReD
10-15-2008, 10:11 PM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Scents of Jannah
btw, is it obvious that the girl in the second poem dies? :?
No, but maybe thats because I'm just slow :hiding: :-[
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Ibn Abi Ahmed
10-15-2008, 10:19 PM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Scents of Jannah
btw, is it obvious that the girl in the second poem dies? :?
I think that's whats awesome about the poem..it means something different to everyone, everyone gets it in a different way..i.e. I interpreted..and it was something different..and others would probably be different as well.
Makes it very enjoyable to read if it's like that because each time you read you interpret it differently :thumbs_up
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Snowflake
10-15-2008, 10:21 PM
oh no! lol
she has to die :skeleton: :BeRightBack: lol
and bro Hakim plz feel free to add to your collection inshaAllah
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IbnAbdulHakim
10-15-2008, 10:25 PM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Scents of Jannah
and bro Hakim plz feel free to add to your collection inshaAllah
i feel like printing it out and adding it in a private collection
in which it may remain the only poem for a long time due to its level of depth
i dont have any other poems yet sis
i have my own personal collection but im considering starting one of the masterpieces from LI's members.
so far you and abu sayyad have taken my breath away with your poetry
jazaKAllah khair to you both
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Snowflake
10-15-2008, 10:26 PM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Abu Sayyad
I think that's whats awesome about the poem..it means something different to everyone, everyone gets it in a different way..i.e. I interpreted..and it was something different..and others would probably be different as well.
Makes it very enjoyable to read if it's like that because each time you read you interpret it differently :thumbs_up
that's a good point too mashaAllah... it's just that I pictured everything so vividly, including her death, so it not being obvious to the reader is bothering me a bit. But, I will give it a little longer and see how I feel.
shukran bro
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IbnAbdulHakim
10-15-2008, 10:30 PM
^ well sis you could alter it a little but i found the way it ended good enough as it is
but upto you inshaAllaah
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Güven
10-15-2008, 10:34 PM
OMG !!
whats this im reading INCREDIBLE poems on LI these last Hours :ooh:
MashaAllah Sis , JazakAllahu Khair...
:w:
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Snowflake
10-16-2008, 04:21 PM
format_quote Originally Posted by
JolieFleur
I.....is lost for words
Seriously, the images were....Rabeee! I just loved it sis...if you had entered the poetry contest you wudda won hands down :ooh: please stay tuned for the next contest insha'Allah
lol no comment! glad u liked it though :D
format_quote Originally Posted by
IbnAbdulHakim
i dont have any other poems yet sis
i have my own personal collection but im considering starting one of the masterpieces from LI's members...so far you and abu sayyad have taken my breath away with your poetry..jazaKAllah khair to you both
Ah, ok! Wa iyyak bro and thanks for your kind comments and support.
format_quote Originally Posted by
Güven
OMG !!
whats this im reading INCREDIBLE poems on LI these last Hours :ooh:
MashaAllah Sis , JazakAllahu Khair...
:w:
lol@big face! wa iyyak Guven bro - it's all praise to Allah.
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Snowflake
10-16-2008, 04:23 PM
:sl:
Regret
beauty of all shapes, color and size
what hadn't he looked at with those eyes?
until a veil of blindness had descended
his days of transgression suddenly ended
now his eyes are dead to the sinful gaze
his mind begins to clear of evil's haze
he'd tasted the pleasure of forbidden fruit
yet his soul remained famished in dispute
"why?" he repeats, "Do I feel empty inside?"
until the answer comes in a blessed disguise
the distant sound of Qur'anic recitation
he knows what he must do without hesitation
as now in the sundown of his life
when self-denial is no longer rife
he clearly sees what he's left behind
and wonders how he could've been so blind?
he remembers in the spare room.. a dusty nook
something priceless lies in the shape of a book
not once he'd glanced at a single page
but had left it there to yellow with age
a desperate hunger begins to fill his soul
the recitation is getting louder nextdoor
gripping his stick he reaches the spare room
sending things flying in its murky gloom
and soon.. his hand settles upon the dusty Book
a sob explodes in his chest, oh how long it took!
his heart soars as he opens its pages
like million birds let out of their cages
repentance mists over sad eyes with tears
"will Allah ever forgive me - since death nears?"
and as if something is telling him to keep listening...
he hears.."And Seek forgiveness of Allah;surely Allah is Forgiving.." (73:20)
willing his eyes to see, just for a few seconds
to see Allah's Words, His gift of Guidence
in hope of forgiveness he raises his hands
as tears splash onto the Holy Qur'an
(Edited)
:w:
:-[
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Nσσя'υℓ Jαииαн
10-16-2008, 04:31 PM
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OMG!!! This made me almost cry :( SubhanAllah so heartfelt and true!! MashaAllah sis <3
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Snowflake
10-16-2008, 04:33 PM
((((awww sis mashaAllah)))) jazakAllahu khayr :)
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Na7lah
10-16-2008, 04:43 PM
mashallah i loooooved the second and last one
clearly you'r really talented mashallah!!!!!!
jazakallah khair sis :D
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Snowflake
10-16-2008, 05:05 PM
ty muslimah sis
:D:-[ < i wanna merge these into one, cuz that's how your comment made me feel lol! :p
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Ayesha Rana
10-16-2008, 05:23 PM
Awwww Masha'Allah, ur poetry is beautiful. I love writing poetry to catch phases in my life but i'm not so brave to share cos i feel safer if it's inside me lol if that means anything at all^^!
Jazakillah khairun for sharing
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Snowflake
10-16-2008, 05:39 PM
wa iyyaki, thank you for liking. I believe everyone has the potential as we all possess emotions and an imagination. It just takes different things to trigger it off in us. If that makes sense :p
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IbnAbdulHakim
10-16-2008, 07:21 PM
hmm...
i dunno maybe forever was a bit too good because i didnt feel the last one much at all
though the vocabulary was really good
a bit of criticism is good :D
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Snowflake
10-16-2008, 07:46 PM
^lol! that's cool bro. it depends what we can relate to as well.
p.s. criticism is welcome! :p
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Snowflake
10-16-2008, 07:47 PM
btw, was it obvious he is blind? LOL!
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IbnAbdulHakim
10-16-2008, 07:52 PM
^ i read it again and i felt it a bit more :ooh:
but no its not obvious lol, after your comment i read it again and i felt it even more :-[
mashaAllaah :)
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Snowflake
10-16-2008, 08:01 PM
lol *goes googly eyes* :rollseyes i thought the first bit explained his blindness well
that's it im gonna make things really obvious next time :exhausted
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IbnAbdulHakim
10-16-2008, 08:02 PM
^ or maybe we're just really dense ;D
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Snowflake
10-16-2008, 08:05 PM
^maybe! :laugh:
*runs*
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Re.TiReD
10-16-2008, 08:36 PM
Your other two poems captured me from the start, this only got me from the second stanza onwards. I really liked it though. It was *shiver-factor* lol Masha'Allah.
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Snowflake
10-16-2008, 08:50 PM
awww tnx sis & also for your honesty :D
i can always improve it inshaAllah and im happy cuz i just found out what a stanza is lol ;D :-[
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DaNgErOuS MiNdS
10-16-2008, 09:08 PM
Im not really a poem person but i like these, i think i might pay more attention to poetry.
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Snowflake
10-16-2008, 09:14 PM
ah! now that's an incentive for me to keep writing inshaAllah!
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Re.TiReD
10-16-2008, 09:16 PM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Scents of Jannah
awww tnx sis & also for your honesty :D
i can always improve it inshaAllah and im happy cuz i just found out what a stanza is lol ;D :-[
BarakAllah feeki :)
I would never edit any of my poems, the words that flow first are the best and most sincere ones in my opinion, just use any criticism you may get for future poems insha'Allah
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Snowflake
10-16-2008, 10:05 PM
I chop and change until I am satisfied. The problem is my imagination runs riot and I have so much to write but that isnt possible, hence lots of editing and unfortunately that means sometimes losing the original structure.
having said that I'm off to do edit the third poem :BeRightBack:
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Ibn Abi Ahmed
10-17-2008, 12:39 AM
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^ Don't edit!! It's great the way it is because that's how you thought it out and that gives it a uniqueness. It's your words, they express what you feel and think..cutting and chopping will make it loose that.
I read the third poem, and it was great. I thought of blindness, spiritual blindness though, not physical.
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Snowflake
10-17-2008, 01:54 AM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Abu Sayyad
:sl:
^ Don't edit!! It's great the way it is because that's how you thought it out and that gives it a uniqueness. It's your words, they express what you feel and think..cutting and chopping will make it loose that.
I read the third poem, and it was great. I thought of blindness, spiritual blindness though, not physical.
thanks! but i'd already edited it lol
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IbnAbdulHakim
10-17-2008, 10:11 AM
wow mashaAllaah i think its more beautiful then before!
mashaAllaah !!
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Snowflake
10-17-2008, 03:09 PM
jazakAllahu khayr bro
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Nσσя'υℓ Jαииαн
10-20-2008, 08:33 PM
i have poems but not english :P lol.
yours beats mine tho, mashaAllah.
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Snowflake
10-22-2008, 12:20 AM
lol jazakillah khayr ukhti. why not translate them? :)
hope y'all like this one inshaAllah
Untitled
a silhoutte against the gleaming moon
she stands by a window, in her room
her fingers touch the cold glasspane
tracing rivulets of pouring rain
he said he'd come home tonight
they hadn't argued, there'd been no fight
but no harm had come to him she knew
he was with a new wife and baby too
an emptiness aches inside her barren womb
where no flower now, would ever bloom
motherhood cruelly snatched by a final miscarriage
she'd lowered the drawbridge for a second marriage
he'd promised to fulfil her rights that day
pledged to treat them equally come what may
yet tonight, like so many nights before
she only imagines him coming through the door
she wonders if the moon can see her misery
his light is reflecting much too fiercely
illuminating the delicate contours of her face
her solemn beauty, so dignified with grace
dark eyes glitter with defeated tears
she knows he wont come as dawntime nears
with a hopeful heart she prepares for salah
donning perfumed garments for a meeting with Allah
nearby, a candle and breeze enjoy a flickering dance
when a sudden gust of wind threatens to end their romance
a remorseful husband stands watching from the door
the epitome of forgiveness, in sujood on the floor
:sl:
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Nσσя'υℓ Jαииαн
10-22-2008, 02:54 AM
mashaAllah. so beautiful!!!! I WISH I COULD RIGHT LIKE THAT! lol
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Snowflake
10-22-2008, 08:22 AM
jazakillah khayr sis : ))
btw, i'd love to see your poems :D
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IbnAbdulHakim
10-22-2008, 10:10 AM
wow... sis that topped the second one... i didnt think it possible :uuh: subhanAllaah PUBLISH IT ! you simply must !
btw before you ask if anything is clear :p, she had an abortion and womb got taken out so she cant get preg anymore, he married again by her consent, she awaited him but he took so long she began to wonder if he's ever coming or staying with the other wife, she decides to pray (mashAllah) as she makes sujood she passes away and her husband finds her to his dismay
mashaAllah amazing !
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Re.TiReD
10-22-2008, 10:12 AM
Wow.
That blew me away.
Isnt a woman an epitome of forgiveness when it comes to her husband and the one she loves anyway? (Thats rhetorical) Such a beautiful soul...
SubhanAllah
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Snowflake
10-22-2008, 10:17 PM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Mz
wow... sis that topped the second one... i didnt think it possible :uuh: subhanAllaah PUBLISH IT ! you simply must !
btw before you ask if anything is clear :p, she had an abortion and womb got taken out so she cant get preg anymore, he married again by her consent, she awaited him but he took so long she began to wonder if he's ever coming or staying with the other wife, she decides to pray (mashAllah) as she makes sujood she passes away and her husband finds her to his dismay
mashaAllah amazing !
lol mashaAllah Mz bro. Actually her womb is intact (i.e. barren womb) but due to some complication of miscarriage (not abortion) she is unable to have more children. You've got the next bit right. She actually suggests he marries again (she'd lowered the drawbridge for a second marriage). Her husband promises that he'll treat them both the same, but loses himself in his new wife and child. He keeps promising dates when he will return but fails to come. Then that day, realising how badly he's behaved, he comes home to find her in sujood. She isn't dead though! LOL! She is in so much anguish that she didn't hear him coming in.
Your interpretation had me laughing for ages! JazakAllahu khayr for liking it bro.
format_quote Originally Posted by
JolieFleur
Wow.
That blew me away.
Isnt a woman an epitome of forgiveness when it comes to her husband and the one she loves anyway? (Thats rhetorical) Such a beautiful soul...
SubhanAllah
Absolutely! A woman has so much love to give. But it's when love is fuelled by piety out of love and fear of Allah, that it can be very forgiving and patient and thus survive the cruellest tests of time.
Jazakillah Khayr for appreciating it. : ))
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Ibn Abi Ahmed
10-22-2008, 10:50 PM
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I really love how you describe everything. Her surroundings, her past, and her feelings and your use of imagery is awesome!
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Nσσя'υℓ Jαииαн
10-23-2008, 02:56 AM
Sis ur poems make me wanna write...:)
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Na7lah
10-23-2008, 02:57 AM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Light of Heaven
Sis ur poems make me wanna write...:)
i know :D u'r really talented mashallah! :thumbs_up
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Snowflake
10-23-2008, 08:34 AM
thank you and jazakAllah khayr br. Abu Sayyad
Noor sis, write something! You know I'll love to read it :)
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Al-Zaara
10-23-2008, 08:42 AM
That last one got me to tears! MashaAllah, soooo awesome. Brilliant.
Make sure you publish it, at least copyright it, lady!!
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Snowflake
10-23-2008, 09:40 AM
aw jazakillah khayr ukhti! Br. Mz suggested that too. I totally don't have a clue how to go about it though.
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IbnAbdulHakim
10-23-2008, 09:54 AM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Scents of Jannah
lol mashaAllah Mz bro. Actually her womb is intact (i.e. barren womb) but due to some complication of miscarriage (not abortion) she is unable to have more children. You've got the next bit right. She actually suggests he marries again (she'd lowered the drawbridge for a second marriage). Her husband promises that he'll treat them both the same, but loses himself in his new wife and child. He keeps promising dates when he will return but fails to come. Then that day, realising how badly he's behaved, he comes home to find her in sujood. She isn't dead though! LOL! She is in so much anguish that she didn't hear him coming in.
Your interpretation had me laughing for ages! JazakAllahu khayr for liking it bro.
my versions far more dramatic :p
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Nσσя'υℓ Jαииαн
10-23-2008, 02:33 PM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Scents of Jannah
thank you and jazakAllah khayr br. Abu Sayyad
Noor sis, write something! You know I'll love to read it :)
Looll, I know you would! :coolious:
You called me Noor lool :P
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Snowflake
10-24-2008, 01:48 PM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Mz
my versions far more dramatic :p
i know.. my poor heroine lol
format_quote Originally Posted by
Light of Heaven
Looll, I know you would! :coolious:
You called me Noor lool :P
I know! if i'd said
"light, plz write".. it wouldve rhymed
i dont wanna start talking in rhymes as well lol :enough!:
ab kuch likh bhi do :P
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Nσσя'υℓ Jαииαн
10-24-2008, 07:26 PM
lol. well i gotta translate it, but i wont post here :P ill jus show u.
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Snowflake
10-24-2008, 08:22 PM
ok inshaAllah and yeh dont post it here.. :p
*cough*yaani mere kebab mein haddi na bann LOL!
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Nσσя'υℓ Jαииαн
10-24-2008, 08:33 PM
^^Lol!!!! I wonttt.
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Snowflake
05-18-2009, 02:14 PM
~My Beloved~
Your voice filled the room, strong and clear
You was talking about Islam, your tone sincere
You related Hadiths and taught what you knew
Oh how I wanted to be like you!
You seemed to think, breathe and live for Islam
Seeking the pleasure of Allah, your only plan
How you benefitted the Ummah, for Allah's sake
I marvelled at the blessings you would rake
And like rain drops constantly falling upon a rock
I felt the trickle of emotions that didn't stop
Time fanned the flames of respect and admiration
Giving birth to a love beyond my imagination
Oh! If only you knew how I chided myself!
Months of torture followed as I scolded myself
I wasn't good enough for you, on this I'd dwell
But my love was sincere, so only time would tell
And though your love was like a thorn in my side
My feelings from you, I continued to hide
My heart shuddered yet I'd seal my lips for duaa
But how could I hide my longing from Allah?
Then came the day The Merciful and Kind, answered my plea
For The Turner of hearts, turned your heart to me
How you worried this feeling was a trick of shaytan
You went away seeking refuge in The Holy Qur'an
But my beloved, you realised your feelings were pure
You were amazed by what you felt but you knew it was true
Allah had placed love in your heart for me
Alhumdulillah! That day you proposed marriage to me
Of course I accepted! What more could I want?
A servant of Allah who has the beauty of imaan..
And so we wait for the day Allah will unite us
I pray The Merciful will never ever part us
My beloved, I pray to Allah for Paradise for you
Success in both Worlds, in my daily duaa for you
I pray in both lives, Allah blesses our union (ameen)
My love, I couldn't have wished for a better companion!
Alhumdulillahi Ya Rabbil Alamiin!
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Cabdullahi
05-19-2009, 06:42 AM
wow the smell of jannah is not messing around!!
good poems! mashallah
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HopeFul
05-19-2009, 07:01 AM
Assalamoalaikum
I read them all, oh WOW WOW WOW, what is stopping you from publishing them , my favourite one would be the third one..
JazakAllah sister
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Snowflake
05-19-2009, 08:54 AM
loll bro abdullahi thanks!
thanks sis Hopeful! :)
I'm hoping to write more and try to get them published inshaAllah. Please do dua for me x
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Ummu Sufyaan
05-19-2009, 08:59 AM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Scents of Jannah
:sl:
Untitled
a silhoutte against the gleaming moon
she stands by a window, in her room
her fingers touch the cold glasspane
tracing rivulets of pouring rain
he said he'd come home tonight
they hadn't argued, there'd been no fight
but no harm had come to him she knew
he was with a new wife and baby too
an emptiness aches inside her barren womb
where no flower now, would ever bloom
motherhood cruelly snatched by a final miscarriage
she'd lowered the drawbridge for a second marriage
he'd promised to fulfil her rights that day
pledged to treat them equally come what may
yet tonight, like so many nights before
she only imagines him coming through the door
she wonders if the moon can see her misery
his light is reflecting much too fiercely
illuminating the delicate contours of her face
her solemn beauty, so dignified with grace
dark eyes glitter with defeated tears
she knows he wont come as dawntime nears
with a hopeful heart she prepares for salah
donning perfumed garments for a meeting with Allah
nearby, a candle and breeze enjoy a flickering dance
when a sudden gust of wind threatens to end their romance
a remorseful husband stands watching from the door
the epitome of forgiveness, in sujood on the floor
gd poem, but i have mixed feelings aout it :p
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Snowflake
05-19-2009, 09:10 AM
^lol thanks but tell me!!! which bits you like or dont like? :D
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NIKKY
05-19-2009, 01:25 PM
Wow...! Mashallah a great collection of poems....sis they r amazing...! i feel my little poems r nufing compared to your beautiful one's...! Cant wait 4 the nxt one....!
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Ummu Sufyaan
05-20-2009, 07:07 AM
:sl:
format_quote Originally Posted by
Scents of Jannah
^lol thanks but tell me!!! which bits you like or dont like? :D
oh its nothing to do with the way you wrote...nah good stuff lol ...its the co-wife part if didn't like :exhausted :raging: :anger: :-[ :p but that's not exclusive to your poems :p
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Snowflake
05-20-2009, 08:08 AM
format_quote Originally Posted by
NIKKY
Wow...! Mashallah a great collection of poems....sis they r amazing...! i feel my little poems r nufing compared to your beautiful one's...! Cant wait 4 the nxt one....!
awww jazakiAllah sis! I just read your poem and think it's wonderful, sweet and well written! MashaAllah :statisfie
format_quote Originally Posted by
Umm ul-Shaheed
:sl:
oh its nothing to do with the way you wrote...nah good stuff lol oh dont make me say it...its the co-wife part if didn't like :exhausted :raging: :anger: :-[ :p but that's not exclusive to your poems :p
lolol say it! (makes me wanna write more about co-wives hehe). ;D
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Ummu Sufyaan
05-20-2009, 08:17 AM
:sl:
i did say it
its the co-wife part i didn't like
that was it...nothing in particular, just the "issue" in general :D
makes me wanna write more about co-wives hehe
dont you dare :p
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Snowflake
05-20-2009, 08:28 AM
I know but what dont you like about co-wives? It's a broad topic loool!
It's a beautiful sunnah ;D
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Ummu Sufyaan
05-20-2009, 08:32 AM
:sl:
I know but what dont you like about co-wives?
i don't not like co-wives...i just wouldn't like being one :p...and i guess...well i guess it just seems to poison everything related lol
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Wow post 57, untitled. That is right up there with the top poets, you really need to get them in a book and spread your talent, maybe you could donate proceed to islamic relief. I'm seriously blown away by your writing its the sort of thing you read and think I wish I had written it. Keep us spoilt with your poems sister. Peace
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Snowflake
05-20-2009, 10:11 PM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Umm ul-Shaheed
:sl:
i don't not like co-wives...i just wouldn't like being one :p...and i guess...well i guess it just seems to poison everything related lol
tsk tsk! lol :rollseyes InshaAllah one day you will advocate it! :laugh:
format_quote Originally Posted by
TKTony
Wow post 57, untitled. That is right up there with the top poets, you really need to get them in a book and spread your talent, maybe you could donate proceed to islamic relief. I'm seriously blown away by your writing its the sort of thing you read and think I wish I had written it. Keep us spoilt with your poems sister. Peace
lol wow! thanks for nice compliment bro. I love the donations idea mashaAllah, tnx!
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Snowflake
05-20-2009, 10:12 PM
Believe me when I say....
My beloved husband lie peacefully and rest
lay your weary head upon my lap
Let the day's stresses melt away
But before you sleep I have something to say
I don't want you to worry about money
What don't we have for this life's journey?
So what if our car is old and rusty?
It gets us from A to B, doesn't it?
Our carpet is threadbare, our sofa has sagged
But look what a wonderful husband I've bagged! ;)
Our wall-paper has faded and peeled away
But our smiles lift the gloom away
Why do you feel bad, when your friends buy
Gold for their wives, their kids the latest toy?
You are my adornment, I don't need gold
More than toys, our kids love playing with you tenfold!
When you overheard my friends talking about clothes
A look of guilt shadowed your face and stole
The smile that is more precious to me than wealth
Truly my treasures are your soundness and health
So please, don't feel sad, for enough have we
Are you still listening or have you fallen asleep? <lol couldnt resist that!
Allah has made me your garment and you mine
You conceal my faults better than all the silk fine
My friends houses are filled but still they moan
Because in some ways, their husbands' let them down
But you have never given me a reason to complain
You've shielded me always, from all kinds of pain
In fact, I really love our life of simplicity
A reminder of how our Prophet (saw) lived humbly
What's more my beloved, is that everything will perish
We already have what we really should cherish
Each other, our children and food on the table
A marriage full of love, happy and stable
Every day with you and our kids is a celebration
Wallahi! With you I could live like a bedouin!
So no more guilt and sadness about our situation
No more pressure and self-condemnation
I'm more than happy in my life with you
Allah is my witness, what I have said is true
No more 12 hours shifts - tomorrow come home early
I miss us reciting Quran together so sourly
We will take the children out to the park
We'll race with them and have a good laugh
I hope my dear husband, your heart feels at ease
I will spend from what you earn and still be pleased
Now sleep my beloved with peace in your heart
And I will wake you for Fajr, to a new start..
alhumdulillah
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excellent yet again, I post in continue islamic rhyme, will try do more poetry tho, we couldall compile and donate maybe, not sure how but Im willing
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Snowflake
05-20-2009, 10:29 PM
thanksss bro!! I think I have an idea how but will share it tomorrow inshaAllah. I'm way to sleepy for brainstorming now lol. assalamu alaykum
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Ummu Sufyaan
05-21-2009, 07:03 AM
:sl:
format_quote Originally Posted by
Scents of Jannah
tsk tsk! lol :rollseyes InshaAllah one day you will advocate it! :laugh:
i tell ya what...it'll take some miracle :D
nice poem above tho :)
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muslimah4life
05-21-2009, 01:31 PM
very nice
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Ummu Sufyaan
05-22-2009, 05:35 AM
:sl:
And though your love was like a thorn in my side
sis, if you dont mind my asking, what did you mean by this :)
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Snowflake
05-22-2009, 07:55 PM
Thank you sis muslimah x :sunny:
format_quote Originally Posted by
Umm ul-Shaheed
:sl: i tell ya what...it'll take some miracle :Dnice poem above tho :)
lol inshaAllah :giggling: thanks sis x
format_quote Originally Posted by
Umm ul-Shaheed
:sl:
sis, if you dont mind my asking, what did you mean by this :)
like a thorn in my side lol.. it means something that doesn't stop hurting until treated.. i.e. love/seperation etc etc etc etc... :mmokay:
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Faith.
05-22-2009, 07:58 PM
:sl:
Wow Amazing poems sis..
They're Breathtaking...
Im speechless.!:D
:w:
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Snowflake
05-22-2009, 08:34 PM
aswrwb
jzkiAllah khayr sis.Tnx for your lovely comment :D
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Ummu Sufyaan
05-23-2009, 08:07 AM
:sl:
format_quote Originally Posted by
Scents of Jannah
like a thorn in my side lol.. it means something that doesn't stop hurting until treated.. i.e. love/seperation etc etc etc etc... :mmokay:
ooo, i see :)
you know, this is quite an interesting thread...it seems that each of the poems in it reflect and are "centered" around a particular chapter in your life...from the first one (or maybe it was the second) to the last one, each poem seems to be a "step" progressing forward, reflecting and revolving around this particular chapter of your life which i don't know what it is exactly but have a feeling of what it might be lol
:)
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Snowflake
06-03-2009, 10:40 PM
alhumdulillah finally!! That mustve took week i think :phew :-[
From The Palette of Time
(In memory of the Shuhadah)
Frenzied strokes of imagination, paint vivid pictures in my mind
Bright and bold images, blending from the Palette of Time
Depictions of Battles - of swords flashing in the sun
The sweetest hues of anticipation of martyrdom to come.
Pride shades the sorrow on my face as I imagine the scene
When earth was coloured crimson for the sake of the true deen
Is that glow from the sun or the colour of a martyr's blood
Or a rainbow of love and sacrifice, in Islamic brotherhood
And high from the battlefield, rises a crescendo of yells of pain
A Mujahid strikes for the sake of Allah, a Kafir for worldly gain
For women, wealth and status, thus fools for earthly treasures!
Grieved will you be on the Day, for with you died your pleasures!
Ruby strokes bleed sorrow and anger at the Battle of Uhud
When the cursed Abdullah bin Shahaab, broke my Prophet's tooth!
How I wish my tears could fall at the feet of those - in gratitude
Who fiercely fought to defend the Prophet, until martyrdom ensued
O Mothers' of Martyrs silently weeping, how do I paint your heart?
For truly the colour of patience in grief, a picture can never impart
I cannot paint in my mind, their souls in the green birds of Heaven
But know your beloved sons forever, in Allah's shade were taken
One day, I'll let my mind paint again, pictures of Islamic history
The unimaginable stories of sacrifice, the moments of defeat and victory
O Allah, grant us martyrdom - the faithful believers of your Beloved's Ummah
And make us leave like those before – unforgotten examples of Shahadah.
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Snowflake
06-03-2009, 10:43 PM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Umm ul-Shaheed
:sl:
ooo, i see :)
you know, this is quite an interesting thread...it seems that each of the poems in it reflect and are "centered" around a particular chapter in your life...from the first one (or maybe it was the second) to the last one, each poem seems to be a "step" progressing forward, reflecting and revolving around this particular chapter of your life which i don't know what it is exactly but have a feeling of what it might be lol
:)
*cracks up* sorry but no. most of it is just my crazy imagination ;D
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what a privelage that i can read your work fresh from the effort and strain in which you wrote it. magnificant work sister
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Snowflake
06-03-2009, 10:53 PM
Thank you very much bro :)
Allah saved me! lol
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Cabdullahi
08-02-2009, 11:13 PM
beautiful.......i might learn a few things
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Snowflake
08-03-2009, 12:46 AM
thank you :)
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veiwed your thread again, maash'Allah sister when do we get a new one to read:D
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Snowflake
08-05-2009, 11:14 PM
lol mashaAllah. JzkAllahu khayr bro
when do we get a new one to read
I don't know bro. I feel bad posting my poems to be read when I don't make time to read everybody else's lol. There are so many great poets here mashaAllah. So, when I've given credit where it's due, I'll feel better about posting some more lol.
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format_quote Originally Posted by
Scents of Jannah
lol mashaAllah. JzkAllahu khayr bro
I don't know bro. I feel bad posting my poems to be read when I don't make time to read everybody else's lol. There are so many great poets here mashaAllah. So, when I've given credit where it's due, I'll feel better about posting some more lol.
Dont feel bad, the only guilt should be keeping your talent to yourself. Peace and respect sister
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celina
08-05-2009, 11:24 PM
MashAllah sis I love the poems..bless u.
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Snowflake
08-06-2009, 09:20 AM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Tony
Dont feel bad, the only guilt should be keeping your talent to yourself. Peace and respect sister
lol mashaAllah.. sounds very logical. I will try inshaAllah : )
format_quote Originally Posted by
celina
MashAllah sis I love the poems..bless u.
thanks sis, may Allah bless you and all of us. ameen <3
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Look forward to veiwing the metamorphosis of ur inspiration during Ramadhan into something beautiful and written
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Snowflake
08-21-2009, 12:26 AM
Ameen :)
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Muhaba
08-21-2009, 12:52 AM
Read the first two. they are beautiful. Masha-Allah you are talented!
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Snowflake
08-21-2009, 03:10 PM
JazakiAllah khayr sis :)
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Cabdullahi
08-21-2009, 03:41 PM
best cook and poet
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Snowflake
08-21-2009, 04:14 PM
^lol omG bro. Thank you :embarrass
May Allah make me a better muslimah too! Ameen
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Snowflake
09-13-2009, 07:20 PM
Untitled
Oh those rebellious tresses of hair like silk!
Clinging to feverish skin against their will
Ensnared by rivers of hot fiery tears
Sparkling on her lashes in starry spears
She wants to run, but her soul is restrained
Run across oceans and mountainous terrains
Past glowing horizons of sunrise and sundowns
Under shimmering skies and darkening clouds
Past sleepy valleys and bubbling brooks
Over ferns and heather and furrowed nooks
Through the atmosphere, in dream-like flight
Lucent shades of love, fill her soul tonite
Tonite her soul wants to fly with his
Past stars and planets in celestial bliss
Playing hide-n-seek amongst the stars
Oh, the innocent encounters of loving hearts!
Two souls, kissed by a burst of star dust
Pearlescent within the dark of the Universe
Curling and whirling, unfurling and twirling
Like dove-white feathers on breezes swirling
Of marriage they had long dreamed together
For lovers, the Prophet said,"There's nothing better.."
But time had divulged its secrets of late
That marriage was yet, not in their fate
Though love had given her the strength to endure
His absence at times, tortures her anew
She knows tears are best that are spent in duaa
In humility she stands in Tahajjud before Allah
And as the ache in her heart gently subsides
And on her breath, a prayer for him resides
She knows fanciful flights, love will oft seek
But it's in the rememberance of Allah that hearts find peace
@}->-->--@}->-->--@}->-->--@}->-->--@}->-->--
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excellent work sister, really excellent I dont know what to say that could do justice to this poem. Outstanding, and you wont even let me rep u for it,lol:D
Again sister, awesome poem
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Snowflake
09-14-2009, 10:15 PM
I keep forgetting about this forum. Thanks for liking it bro. :)
I thought no one liked it as no one commented lol :(
Can you recommend a poem by J.Clarke? I tried youtube and found a John Cooper Clarke singing about a toilet. I don't think he isn't the one lol.
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Cabdullahi
09-14-2009, 10:30 PM
classic aunty!
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Snowflake
09-15-2009, 01:50 AM
Thank you nephew :)
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format_quote Originally Posted by
Scents of Jannah
I keep forgetting about this forum. Thanks for liking it bro. :)
I thought no one liked it as no one commented lol :(
Can you recommend a poem by J.Clarke? I tried youtube and found a John Cooper Clarke singing about a toilet. I don't think he isn't the one lol.
lol, its the same one sister
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Snowflake
09-15-2009, 04:05 PM
lol I meant, 'I don't think he's the one'
ok, I'll do that.
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Cabdullahi
09-15-2009, 04:15 PM
i searched it up an found a youtube video of scary hippie men singing.....and the name suns of arqa sounds paganistic to me....their album cover contains an image of the sun
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^^ thats why I warned her first bro. But his poetry is excellent
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Snowflake
09-15-2009, 10:55 PM
:ooh:
Nah, I'll pass. Hamdulillah, despite several attempts, it didn't come up anyways.
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Hayaa
09-15-2009, 11:07 PM
:sl:
MashaAllah! Another meaningful poem from our poetic sis :)
But it's in the rememberance of Allah that hearts find peace
Indeed! Loved this part. :0)
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Ansariyah
09-15-2009, 11:10 PM
sis ur poems are so deep..mashaAllah.
i was wondering, ur last poem is it about marriage? or is it about 2 people who love each other but they have to give up cause they cant get married? im sorry if i'm wrong:embarrass
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Cabdullahi
09-15-2009, 11:13 PM
your ^ reading into it too deep relax!
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format_quote Originally Posted by
Scents of Jannah
:ooh:
Nah, I'll pass. Hamdulillah, despite several attempts, it didn't come up anyways.
yes sister, to be honest you and Abdullahi Are right, it was a bad of me to suggest it, I am sorry, no ill intent meant
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Snowflake
09-16-2009, 10:59 PM
Thanks for liking sis Hayya :)
Yanoorah, yes ukhti they love each other and are waiting get married but at the moment they are oceans part and thats why she misses him so much lol.
yes sister, to be honest you and Abdullahi Are right, it was a bad of me to suggest it, I am sorry, no ill intent meant
No need to apologise bro. I know you meant his poems are good in a an aesthetic sort of way and nothing more. No harm done inshaAllah. Please don't feel bad :)
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