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Muhaba
08-21-2009, 12:16 AM
I should write, my very old poetry as I wrote them over ten years ago.
Sonnet #1
One day as i walked along the beach
wet yellow sand under my feet
a cold wind blew over my face
blowing bits of sand all over the place
the warm summer sun shining above
filled the place with a glow
a cool wave washed over my feet
calling me to the deep blue sea
I decided to enter it just a bit
and that's what I did
suddenly a huge wave came over me
pulling me deep into the sea
try as I might I couldn't break free
and that was the end of me.
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Snowflake
08-21-2009, 12:19 AM
How did you write the poem if it was the end of you? :eek:
lol kidding.. really nice descriptions mashaAllah! More please :statisfie
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Muhaba
08-21-2009, 12:37 AM
ty, sis, i will post more soon insha-Allah. unfortunately i only have a few.
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Hayaa
08-21-2009, 02:55 AM
format_quote Originally Posted by
muhaba
I should write, my very old poetry as I wrote them over ten years ago.
Sonnet #1
One day as i walked along the beach
wet yellow sand under my feet
a cold wind blew over my face
blowing bits of sand all over the place
the warm summer sun shining above
filled the place with a glow
a cool wave washed over my feet
calling me to the deep blue sea
I decided to enter it just a bit
and that's what I did
suddenly a huge wave came over me
pulling me deep into the sea
try as I might I couldn't break free
and that was the end of me.
For some reason, the sea in your poem reminded me of the world; it tempts you with its beauty, eventually attracts you, and then traps you.
That was a great poem [MashaAllah], I want more! =)
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Muhaba
08-21-2009, 08:39 AM
I always felt it had some hidden meaning, but didn't know what it was. TY. insha-Allah more coming soon!
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Snowflake
09-17-2009, 05:32 AM
three weeks flew past so quickly.. :ooh:
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DigitalStorm82
09-17-2009, 09:44 AM
suicide! lol
As I was reading I was thinking to myself... "nooo dont go in!" lol and then I continued to read to your demise lol
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I like it, ending reminds me of spike milligan poetry. very original
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Muhaba
09-18-2009, 03:56 AM
ty everyone, insha-Allah more coming soon, after Eid when i have time to find my poetry notebook.
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Snowflake
09-18-2009, 04:03 AM
InshaAllah :)
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Muhaba
09-26-2009, 06:20 PM
Here's a fairly recent one. It's incomplete. I hope my creativity comes back. I used to write so much poetry, but lately can't seem to.
I am on a road
and there is a fork
in front. of. me
I am so lost
I don't know which way
I should. pro.ceed
Should i go left
or should I go right
Please God. help. me
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Snowflake
09-26-2009, 08:47 PM
^mashaAllah, sounds good even incomplete.. in fact leave it as it is :)
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Gubbleknucker
09-27-2009, 03:59 AM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Hayaa
For some reason, the sea in your poem reminded me of the world; it tempts you with its beauty, eventually attracts you, and then traps you.
*gulp*
That sounds scary--it's a good thing I don't
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Hayaa
09-27-2009, 06:59 AM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Gubbleknucker
it's a good thing I don't
That looks incomplete. :ermm:
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