Sham-e Ummeed (Urdu)

[Rasikh Kashmiri]

Asslamu Alaikum, this is my First post in urdu section and the second one on this board, I hope you enjoy this poetry :)

[Tilmeez]

Wah bohat aala.
Let our poet brother Ustad Rafeeq come in and coment on this from Poetry point of view.

He will surely add something nice to it, Inshallah.

['Abdul Rahmaan]

I haven't seen the image coz my explorer does not load images automatically but I can guess about the poetry to be of great standard since brother Tilmeez has admired it. :D

[Tilmeez]

I am sorry I forgot you. Can you now see the image now?

In fact I had problem with title: Umeed Ki Sham Kabi nahi hoti. I will let you and akhee Rafeeq to comment on rest of the body.

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[CosmicPathos]

wow yaar, we got some Urdu poem-jamming going on here. Love Urdu. As feiz ahmed feiz has said

Zubaan bureeda hoon, zakhm-e-guloo sey harf karo
Umeed-e-sahar ki baat suno

['Abdul Rahmaan]

Every kind of Urdu poetry seems tasteless after reading Iqbal. So, no comments.

[CosmicPathos]

Every kind of Urdu poetry seems tasteless after reading Iqbal. So, no comments.

Come on, Iqbal is a great poet. But others are also interesting in their own right. Iqbal talks from a religious perspective. Feiz ahmed feiz talks from the personal perspective.

[Rasikh Kashmiri]

Wah bohat aala.
Let our poet brother Ustad Rafeeq come in and coment on this from Poetry point of view.

He will surely add something nice to it, Inshallah.

thank you brother for the comments, and I am wating for the respected Ustaad rafeeq to learn from him :)

Jazakumullah khair and thanks for every one who commented :)

[Rafeeq]

:sl:

Mujhy khud bhi elm na tha key me Ustaad qism key kisi tabqey sey taluq rakhta hon, Thanks to Tilmeez :p

I am not Ustaad but a student of poetry yani Tifl-e-maktab. Han, kuch asatza ki mehfilon me zaroor ana jana raha hey, jo Akhee Tilmeez key elm me hey, shayed isi lye ye baar-e-garan mujh na-cheez key na-tawan kandhon pay dal rahey hein.

A little modification to the doubt of Akhee Tilmeez that he is right, Umeed ki sham nehi hoti, technically right, magar shuraa or asaatza hi naey istaarey paida kartey hein. Zimnan, aik guzarish karonga aik bar mery ustad sahab ney mujhy is sher pey toka tha key mayoosi kufr hey, sher tha;

Zulmat-e-shab to kam nhi ho gi
Dil jaley ga, diya jalaney par.

Lehaza, agar shaeri me maqsadeeyat or islaah-e-ehwal bhi shamil ho jaey to ye ghamzon aor ashwaon sey agey nikal jati hey.

Aik adna talib-e-elm ki hesiat sey me brother Rasikh Kashmiri key is khoobsoorat kalam pey mubarak bad pesh karta hon. Mujhey umeed hey key aap kisi Ustaad sey Islah zaroor letey hon gey, agar nhi to behtar hoga ksi ustaad sey islah lijey. Shaeri Ozaan ka khel hey, khayalat is ki khoobsorti. Khayal aap ka hoga aor ozaan ustaad durust kar dein gey, bas kam ban gya.

Meri taraf sey daad qubool kijey. Wah Wah.

PS: Pls. check your rep comments.

[Rasikh Kashmiri]

:sl:

Mujhy khud bhi elm na tha key me ustaad qism key kisi tabqey sey taluq rakhta hon, thanks to tilmeez :p

i am not ustaad but a student of poetry yani tifl-e-maktab. Han, kuch asatza ki mehfilon me zaroon ana jana raha hey, jo akhee tilmeez key elm me hey, shayed isi lye ye baar-e-garan mujh na-cheez key na-tawan kandhon pay dal rahey hein.

A little modification to the doubt of akhee tilmeez that he is right, umeed ki sham nehi hoti, technically right, magar shuraa or asaatza hi naey istaarey paida kartey hein. Zimnan, aik guzarish karonga aik bar mery ustad sahab ney mujhy is sher pey toka tha key mayoosi kufr hey, sher tha;

zulmat-e-shab to kam nhi ho gi
dil jaley ga, diya jalaney par.

Lehaza, agar shaeri me maqsadeeyat or islaah-e-ehwal bhi shamil ho jaey to ye ghamzon aor ashwaon sey agey nikal jati hey.

Aik adna talib-e-elm ki hesiat sey me brother rasikh kashmiri key is khoobsoorat kalam pey mubarak bad pesh karta hon. Mujhey umeed hey key aap kisi ustaad sey islah zaroor letey hon gey, agar nhi to behtar hoga ksi ustaad sey islah lijey. Shaeri ozaan ka khel hey, khayalat is ki khoobsorti. Khayal aap ka hoga aor ozaan ustaad durust kar dein gey, bas kam ban gya.

Meri taraf sey daad qubool kijey. Wah wah.

Ps: Pls. Check your rep comments.

محترم المقام رفیق صاحب
السلام علیکم

آپ کی تحریر اور ہدایات کا شکریہ۔ ان شاء اللہ بھرپور طریقے سے عمل کرنے کی کوشش کروں گا۔

باقی مزید شعر گاہے گاہے پوسٹ کرتا رہوں گا۔ جوکہ وزن میں بھی ہوں گے۔


باقی تلمیذ بھائی نے ایک پوسٹ میں کچھ یوں تحریر کیا ہے۔

last edited by tilmeez; 14 hours ago at 06:23 pm.. Reason: Don't post unnecessary comments. They are not gona help you. You will soon reach 50 posts mark. Don't rush. Think quality, my brother :)

سو ان سے میری گزارش ہے کہ میں نے پوسٹ زیادہ کرنے کے لئے تو کچھ نہیں پوسٹ کیا۔ اور نہ ہی فضول اپنے پوسٹ زیادہ کرنے کا شوق ہے۔ اس لئے آپ بے فکر رہئے۔ بلکہ کل میرے ساتھ مسئلہ پیش آ رہا تھا کہ جب میں اقتباس کرتا تھأ تو پوسٹ ہوجاتی تھی لیکن میری بات ظاہر نہیں ہوتی تھی۔اس میں میرا کیا قصور ہوسکتا ہے بڑے بھائی؟؟