cant think of a title

[Mr. Baldy]

aslaam alykum,

ok well another poem by me!!!! i know what ur thinking ahhhh maaaaannnnnnnnn not antother one, doesnt he ever shut up!!!

well im not going to HA HA (that is not an invitation to tell me to shut up *cough[zak]cough*..... coz now im writing one on death....

well i cant think of a title, so maybe one of u peeps can help me out with that...

ok *clears throat*

when i look in the mirror,
what do i see?
who is that looking back at me?
is that who i want to be?

when i walk down the street,
do i let my eyes feast?
or do i lower my gaze,
in hope i can avoid the blaze?

when the time comes for salah,
do i pray to allah?
or do i make excuses,
and say tomorow inshallah?

when i look at this time of fithnah,
is my reaction astugfirullah?
or do i get pleasure,
from what is haram?

who is the person i wnat to be?

END

i know what ur thinking, crazy rhyme scheme....... :zip:

wa alykum aslaam

[h1jabi_sista]

:sl:
mashallah thats deep!!! :thumbs_up the rehtorical question have such a good effect mashallah!!!!!!!

i think you should call it ''who am i?''
or reflect it with the last line...''who is the person i want to be?''
or......who am i trying to be? or even better....''what shall i be when i finished trying to be someone i dont want to be'' :)

im only kidding, i was serious about the first 3 :)


:)

:w:

[Mr. Baldy]

aslaam alykum,

thanks for the titles, hmmmmmm like the last suggestion, but i think ill go with "who is the person i want to be?"

jazakullah

wa alykum aslam

[sistajannah]

MashAllah akhi that was good :thumbs_up

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[Ra`eesah]

Assalamu'Alaykum

yes very nice mashallah and powerful...funny i also thought up "Who am I" as a title... :D

[Mr. Baldy]

aslaam alykum,

you peeps are toooo kind.

why didnt i think of "who am i" as a title?? hmmm i guess my brain doesnt function that way.

wa alykum aslaam

[bro_faz]

I think you should call it "contemplating reflections" deep poem deep name lol

[~fUrRrI~]

wow masha'Allah! talent.....!!!!!
soo0o deep!!


i thought of who am i? as well :zip:

[Tazkiyahtulnafs]

masha'Allah that is a really good poem jazaka'Allahukhair for posting it up even thought ppl tell you to shut up

[Lateralus63]

:sl:

i would say call it

Rhetoric Realities.



A rhetorical question is a question you ask which people already know the answer to, but ask it for the sake of educating people.

[h1jabi_sista]

:sl:
i like that one^^----- :)

:w:

[Mr. Baldy]

aslaam alykum,

ok thanks for the suggestions, i will continue it further if u want.

wa alykum aslaam

[Mr. Baldy]

aslaam alykum,

^^^how do i do that??

wa alykum aslaam

[Souljette]

Mashallahh nicee