The Fiery Hearth.

[Skillganon]

Ok, I did a quick one after brother Habeshi's poem. Correct me if I use Islamic terms or anything incorrect in islam.

The Fiery Hearth.

You gave us life, do we take heed,
You set us on the path,
How wretched we are to earn your wrath.
O Al-Rahman have mercy on our heart
Do not make the brime stone our hearth,
Whose fire is no laugh.
So let us wipe the mirth from our mouth,
And guide us to Siratul Mustaqeem.
Make our feet firm on the path,
Trip not us on the bridge of Judgement,
Who’s crossing shaky for those wicked
Allah(swt) make our feet firm on the path
That earns your pleasure not your wrath.
Let us not taste the displeasure that has been decreed,
How miserable will we be on that day,
Torment of fire will hiss at our hills,
And rattle our heart like a fiery snake.
Let not be receiver of tormenty hell.
Who’s fuel will be brimstone and men.

Grant as your mercy Oh Al-Raheem.
Without you we are a sure loser.
Taker of life.
Let not this life hinder us Jannah
Wall not us with brimstone,
Remove our stones of burden.

To you is our return,
You we fear, gain us not your displeasure,
You we lose not hope, gain us your mercy.
Forgive my brothers, Forgive my sisters.

[Skillganon]

P.s. I am not much of a poet. Quite new to this.

Sisters can comment too....

[Al_Imaan]

not bad at all....its great for a beginner....:thumbs_up

[Skillganon]

Ok, I gather this is a nice way of saying it is crap.

Don't worry, I too think so. :lol:

It does not really flow.

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[sevgi]

the flow depends on how u read it...i was actually quite touched by the meaning. very heart felt..thank u very much skillganon.

what ur missing is rhythm...but guess wat...uve written ur fisrt free verse poem...i love them.:D