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    she was locked in her room
    vivid flashbacks of an empty life loomed
    as she sat on her bed she presumed-
    -that the situation was so bad
    it was THATS IT! complete sadness had-
    -her suffer too much pain
    she held a razor across her wrist ready to slice those veins
    far from an optimist ..the only thing left was the pessimist approach
    she played god..turning back now! was simply was too late ... .
    her fate-
    was to take her gifted life and encroach
    punctured arms that bled
    and led
    her to a hellacious death
    lets rewind the clock
    and see what had her heart locked
    her name was IMAN and this was not an irony
    because faith she had, she prayed, lived islamically and guarded her privacy
    top student at her class
    facing immature adolescents was soon to prove a big task
    her clothing-
    caused hysterical laughs, she a wore a black jilbab not to be showing-
    her body, but they taunted her with the name batman
    she complained to teachers but they'd never understand
    it had gotten worse over the years
    her performance at school dropped,enshrouded with fear
    no shoulder to cry on,no close peers
    it was too much to handle
    a diminishing light on a thin candle
    enough was enough
    she came back home looking depleted and rough
    thoughts that had been growing in her mind for years like a poisonous mushroom
    here she was locked in her room
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    Re: Dead rose

    thats sad bro
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    Re: Dead rose

    Sometimes you have to write sad poetry
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    Re: Dead rose

    it was too much to handle
    a diminishing light on a thin candle
    I like it
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    Re: Dead rose

    format_quote Originally Posted by J.U.N.I.O.R View Post
    Sometimes you have to write sad poetry
    o REALLY?
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    Re: Dead rose

    Im trying to write about everything, all subjects and all problems but im having abit of difficulty and that difficulty is simplifying the poems to make them enjoyable
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    Re: Dead rose

    ^ keep at it
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    Re: Dead rose

    Bro, if you write about things when you're really feeling it it'll prolly come out better Insha'Allah. But keep it up, you're good
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    Re: Dead rose

    wow, amazing poem akhee.you mostly write those 'rap' type of poems, which im not really into, but this one i definately liked.
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    Re: Dead rose

    ^ok so ur into long ,story type poems and not the short rap oriented poems
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    Re: Dead rose

    yup, i only ever worte one 'rap' kind of one; http://www.islamicboard.com/creative...5-soldier.html
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    Re: Dead rose

    that was nice

    ^ok so ur into long ,story type poems and not the short rap oriented poems
    i like anything that has a good flow
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    Speech will guide you, and silence will protect you.
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    Re: Dead rose

    im trying to perfect my story telling as well as keeping it short so the readers Dont fall asleep...inshallah
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    Re: Dead rose

    ^lol bambi

    This is gooooood stuff mashaAllah oh:

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    nice words
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    ...And lots of them ring true.
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    Re: Dead rose

    thanks
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