shun

[Cabdullahi]

'shun'







silly assumptions
make a misconception
despite clear corrections
still no redemption
ill-preparation
malicious implications
a kafirs insinuation
mislabeling a big portion
with a small portion
media distortion
puppet politicians
both left and right sections
creators of tension
example?, common infliction
'women forced to a hijab application'
no it prevents intrusion
we keep modest,enjoy ur! unlawful seduction
like i said ^ given explanation
still no redemption
still Perpetration
we need to stay as a nation
soul purification
fight against inhibition
-now!!!!, cant wait for jesus descension
its about time this oppression
we shun

[Soulja Girl]

:sl:

Lol niice but I had trouble reading... :hmm: :D

:w:

[Cabdullahi]

how about now??^^

[truemuslim]

mashallah kwl poem.......unfortunatly i wasnt able to understand notin xcept 2 lines (about) :mmokay:
but yeh that doesnt matter wat does matter is how many rhymes u get, nd how good they rhymes, how good the sylabuls r (spelld wrong) nnnd of course, the levelity of gangstitity. :D so yeh i thnk its awesome :D

edit: o yeh nd also the color nd size is sooooo just a bit :blind:

edit 2: nvrmind, u've pimped it out :D

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[Cabdullahi]

its kinda crappy...oh well:(

[IbnAbdulHakim]

its kool bro :)

shun it all i say :D

[Musaafirah]

Masha'alla bro that's real good!
I'd rep you but apparently I've repped too many people in the past 24 hours :muddlehea

[Sahabiyaat]

:thumbs_up that was good MashaAllah, ur only saying its bad so we say its good and then u say no and then we say yes and then theres a fight :D

[Cabdullahi]

i think its abit too hard to understand,should of made it abit simpler

[Musaafirah]

^^ No bro, it's alright as it is!
How would you attempt to simplify it?

[IbnAbdulHakim]

^ dnt change ur poetry for these feeshers, poetries about expressing yourself :D

if you understand it, and feel something from reading it, then its yours bro! its a reference into your past and into your feelings

you can look back on it, but DONT change it :)

[truemuslim]

lol i could barely understand it but it was still owning coz i was able to see the message in ther. mashallah! :(

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:salamext:

MashaAllaah nice.

Some advice; When rhyming, put the same sounding rhymes together, e.g. application, nation, preparation

and

redemption, descension, tension

etc.

Hope that didn't offend you :X

[Cabdullahi]

huh? why would it offend me to take advice from a kind sister and an older poet that knows her stuff well

[Pen Marks]

the poem is amazing mashallah! LI has some of the best poets ever :p

[Re.TiReD]

sheeshness

[Cabdullahi]

thanks alot guys

[Re.TiReD]

there you go. no comment

[Cabdullahi]

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[Na7lah]

i think its great :)

[Cabdullahi]

^
thanks sister

[truemuslim]

Lol i think it was smashed up, crushed on, beaten, eaten, owneded, powned, unseen, un heard.....yeh watever jokie said.

sheesh cant take no compliment :mmokay: