Holy land

[Cabdullahi]

it was said they were too busy smoking hookah when children of israel came
and when they came direful and evilness was to be a part of their game
setting sights on the city with one ambiton and that was to reclaim.... it
,it would mean things would never be the same would it?
Beautiful sunshine, prominent skyline
mountains with unimaginable incline
open markets that sold from aromatic saffron
to glistening iron
hearing children's far away giggles was enough to relieve a heartburn
sadly all gone!

they were submissive and too laid back
no counteract to the attack
worse than a holocaust
completely flossed
they got bossed and over the west-bank barrier tossed
excogitation of an exclamation
no seeming avail to this jewish dictation
but patient is the little palestinian boy with the sling shot
aiming for a weak spot
on that goliath of a tank
prophet david did it ...so he feels he can.
today palestine is deeply hurt we need to tightly hold her hand
and run away through the hot sand
far away to a place refuge

[kwolney01]

very nice brother!!

Keep up the good work!!

Thanks for posting!!

I wish you the best!

[Cabdullahi]

thanks kwolney

[Re.TiReD]

Masha'Allah. Me likes it.

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[Cabdullahi]

bambii

[truemuslim]

u must luv u cat alot...blurting its name outta nowher pshh. :rolleyes:

jus wonderin are u actually freestylin in this?

[Cabdullahi]

i did it last night it ,freestyle like how?

[truemuslim]

like spit rhymes jus like dat with only a 5 second thinkin nd someone happen to be writing it at the same time....

thats tru talent. writin before is crap.
thinkin aint necassary for poetry.

one of my brothers always says lets freestyle nd we start doin lines, like he do lines nd i do lines nd so on.
thats freestyle. if ur doing it alone tho , which is harder, but better, then thats truuue talent.
besides it always ends up ur best work. :p like my siggy. thats my fave own freestyle i was doin while playin basketball :D

sorry for the freestylin lesson. :o

[Cabdullahi]

this is me freestylin now:
yo im j to the u.. n ...i ..o ...R
my struggle reaches very far
im too vivid you can never see me even on hdtv
lowering my gaze.. thats a no! chance of me gettin VD

pretty lame

[truemuslim]

Lol
no its not lame, keep doin stuff like that, (nd post themm!) nd you'll get places!

poetry is when u write all gayly nd u can edit nd all. thats not talent. thats like a story
freestyle is ..well actually i jus told u :p but u kno here, in school nd on the bus nd everywher, you see peopl freestyle at each other, its the new generation of fighting, only the lame ppl fight, the gangsta ppl rap at each other, the crowd goes " OHhh!" nd "booo" so u can see who won. when u get a rhyme that owns all , everyone backs off nd no one tries again , meanin u won.
THATS TALENT
a line that usually wins is this.:
im arab so call me desert eagle

now its a line, before it was a freestylin line :D it had more to it but this line was the best

[Snowflake]

mashaAllah!

very nice and sad