My Poetry

[Muhaba]

I should write, my very old poetry as I wrote them over ten years ago.

Sonnet #1
One day as i walked along the beach
wet yellow sand under my feet
a cold wind blew over my face
blowing bits of sand all over the place
the warm summer sun shining above
filled the place with a glow
a cool wave washed over my feet
calling me to the deep blue sea
I decided to enter it just a bit
and that's what I did
suddenly a huge wave came over me
pulling me deep into the sea
try as I might I couldn't break free
and that was the end of me.

[Snowflake]

How did you write the poem if it was the end of you? :eek:

lol kidding.. really nice descriptions mashaAllah! More please :statisfie

[Muhaba]

ty, sis, i will post more soon insha-Allah. unfortunately i only have a few.

[Hayaa]

I should write, my very old poetry as I wrote them over ten years ago.

Sonnet #1
One day as i walked along the beach
wet yellow sand under my feet
a cold wind blew over my face
blowing bits of sand all over the place
the warm summer sun shining above
filled the place with a glow
a cool wave washed over my feet
calling me to the deep blue sea
I decided to enter it just a bit
and that's what I did
suddenly a huge wave came over me
pulling me deep into the sea
try as I might I couldn't break free
and that was the end of me.

For some reason, the sea in your poem reminded me of the world; it tempts you with its beauty, eventually attracts you, and then traps you.

That was a great poem [MashaAllah], I want more! =)

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[Muhaba]

I always felt it had some hidden meaning, but didn't know what it was. TY. insha-Allah more coming soon!

[Snowflake]

three weeks flew past so quickly.. :ooh:

[DigitalStorm82]

suicide! lol

As I was reading I was thinking to myself... "nooo dont go in!" lol and then I continued to read to your demise lol

[Tony]

I like it, ending reminds me of spike milligan poetry. very original

[Muhaba]

ty everyone, insha-Allah more coming soon, after Eid when i have time to find my poetry notebook.

[Snowflake]

InshaAllah :)

[Muhaba]

Here's a fairly recent one. It's incomplete. I hope my creativity comes back. I used to write so much poetry, but lately can't seem to.

I am on a road
and there is a fork
in front. of. me

I am so lost
I don't know which way
I should. pro.ceed

Should i go left
or should I go right
Please God. help. me

[Snowflake]

^mashaAllah, sounds good even incomplete.. in fact leave it as it is :)

[Gubbleknucker]

For some reason, the sea in your poem reminded me of the world; it tempts you with its beauty, eventually attracts you, and then traps you.

*gulp*

That sounds scary--it's a good thing I don't

[Hayaa]

it's a good thing I don't

That looks incomplete. :ermm: