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Pen Marks
07-27-2008, 06:46 PM
:sl:
In the darkness
I’m lying
The darkness
Is closing in
I don’t know where I am
Don’t know what to do
But you came in
Pulled me towards your light
And I lay there
In your arms
As you held me tight
And I felt it
Your heart beat
Beating hard and fast
As if jumping out of your chest
You thought I wouldn’t last
But I did
Yes, I did
I saw you
I saw you in my dreams
you were there
But it’s not what it seems
You stabbed me
You pierced me
With your little dart
While the droplets
Of sadness
Drained out of my heart
And it emptied
So empty
Yes, it did
So empty
Then you showed me
The right way
The right way I should go
And you taught me
You taught me
The things that I should know
And you whispered
In my ear
Some very good things
Good things
That matter
That my soul still sings…
And thank you
Yes, thank you
Thank you oh so much
I’ll remember
Your warm words
And your gentle touch…
:w:
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Nájlá
07-27-2008, 10:29 PM
format_quote Originally Posted by
:: MuMiNaH ::
:sl:
You stabbed me
You pierced me
With your little dart
While the droplets
Of sadness
Drained out of my heart
:w:
jazakallah khair sis for sharing:)
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Pen Marks
08-28-2008, 08:13 PM
:bump:
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Pen Marks
01-30-2009, 04:49 PM
A Long Road
I walk on a road long and hard
I have a goal and a strong will
But will Allah give me strenghth and power
To be able to get across that hill?
*
I walk toward an end
An End that I do not see
But I'm not scared...why?
'Cause I know Allah's with me
*
I travel on remembering my Lord
And now I'm more stronger than i ever was before
I've submited my will and I'm happy content,
But forever I will be striving for more
*
I haven't gotten to the hard part yet
The road is still paved and smooth
The Dunya is a store-filled reststop
But I will not stop at Shaitan's booth
By: Me
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IbnAbdulHakim
01-30-2009, 05:32 PM
^ wow its pretty cool mashAllah
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Yanal
01-30-2009, 05:46 PM
There is a Hadith where it says not to be special because "Narrated by AbuSalmah, the prophet (pbuh) said "That a believer is simple and generous but the profiligate is decitful and ignoable."
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*Yasmin*
01-30-2009, 09:23 PM
Ma shaa' Allah , meaningful:thumbs_up
baraka Allahu feke ukhte
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Pen Marks
01-30-2009, 10:41 PM
jazakallah khair
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chacha_jalebi
01-30-2009, 10:43 PM
aaa nice
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Zahida
01-30-2009, 10:58 PM
:sl: Thankyou for sharing that with us, it was very beautiful............:w::)
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Pen Marks
01-31-2009, 01:06 AM
format_quote Originally Posted by
chacha_jalebi
aaa nice
format_quote Originally Posted by
Zahida
:sl: Thankyou for sharing that with us, it was very beautiful............:w::)
thanks! :D
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Pen Marks
08-21-2009, 10:37 PM
:sl:
Comment and Critique plz
They say they want to speak
But they never listen or hear
They say they want to be unique
But they're just copycats, never sincere
They say that they're weak
But they never get stronger, are they too full of fear?
They say they want to think
But do they ever use their minds, do they ever adhere?
They stand, but they're dead with no growth
Not just the women, not just the men, but both
"Hold tight to the rope" they were told
But yet behold!
The rope dangles in front of their eyes
And still to lazy to grab the prize?
Some more ambitious are barely holding on
And if they tried harder, surely they would be drawn
High above where those lazy ones will never set their eyes
High above in the highest of paradise
I'm not sure what inspired it but yeh... :hmm: Let me know what yu think..
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Muhaba
08-22-2009, 01:30 PM
It's a good poem!
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Duhaa786M
08-22-2009, 08:10 PM
Masha-Allah sis! thats really great, do you always write such things?
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Beardo
08-23-2009, 01:21 AM
Masha'Alllah!!!
Minor correction: 3rd line, you said "the say", I believe you meant "they say"
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alcurad
08-23-2009, 02:10 AM
try to avoid too much rhyme, I know that sounds counter intuitive, but you can only express so much hen constrained with rhyming. another thing would be try to be more subtle, hide the meanings by adding more layers, that way you'll reach access a wider range of emotions, imagery.
good attempt though :), I disn't want to sound too negative but apparently failed =_= sorry, it's just that you can put words together, you do have a knack, just a little tweaking needed
~all the best.
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The bones of ur poem are in excellent health, practice writting more and the flesh will follow
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Sarahd
08-23-2009, 05:47 AM
Very nice poem poem sister, you are a good writer!
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alcurad
08-23-2009, 09:44 PM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Tony
The bones of ur poem are in excellent health, practice writing more and the flesh will follow
you know I was thinking of that exaxt analogy just now :)
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IbnAbdulHakim
08-24-2009, 12:17 AM
i really like your message
its deep !
i just wish i knew the flow you had in your mind - every poet has his own reading right :)
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Pen Marks
08-24-2009, 01:54 AM
format_quote Originally Posted by
Rashad
Masha'Alllah!!!
Minor correction: 3rd line, you said "the say", I believe you meant "they say"
yeh, I will fix it, thanks
format_quote Originally Posted by
alcurad
try to avoid too much rhyme, I know that sounds counter intuitive, but you can only express so much hen constrained with rhyming. another thing would be try to be more subtle, hide the meanings by adding more layers, that way you'll reach access a wider range of emotions, imagery.
good attempt though :), I disn't want to sound too negative but apparently failed =_= sorry, it's just that you can put words together, you do have a knack, just a little tweaking needed
~all the best.
lesser rhyme? I think i focused on the rhyming part a little too much in this poem :hmm:
Jazakallah khair it wasn't negative, and I'll keep your suggestions in mind
format_quote Originally Posted by
Tony
The bones of ur poem are in excellent health, practice writting more and the flesh will follow
Lol :hiding: So how do I make it more
fleshy?
Barakallah feekum for all the comments
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alcurad
08-24-2009, 03:22 PM
^a lot ^.
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Pen Marks
08-24-2009, 06:13 PM
Today I start a new page and my life begins
I am your servant, your slave
I engrave in my heart your beautiful name
And this month starts now with blessings from you
Nourish our souls and hep us stay true
As we look back at a year of sins
And at the life that we've spent
We ask you ya Allah to heal our every dent
We stand long hours into the night
Striving to get closer to that blinding light
To live another eleven months in full control
And we ask you again to nourish our soul
Is that any better? I don't think i can write a poem without any rhyme, alcurad :embarrass
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Yes it is a good poem sister^^^
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alcurad
08-25-2009, 12:02 AM
ah, I was simply offering a suggestion :)
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Muhaba
08-25-2009, 12:38 PM
I like rhyming poems better than nonrhyming ones. Lovely poem!
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al Amaanah
08-25-2009, 12:43 PM
:salamext:
masha Allah nice poems, keep the good work up.
:w:
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Pen Marks
08-26-2009, 02:50 AM
Ya Abati - By Me
I remember when you held me high
And smiled when I would talk
And the sun smiled and so did the sky
And your hand held mine as we went out for our walk
You’re amazing
I’m in awe of all you’ve done
For you I’ll do anything
Father, my heart you have won
And as I walk by your side
They say, that’s his little girl
And my heart bursts in pride
Because I’m your little pearl
And Ya Abi Ya Abati
You taught me many things full of value
And Ya Abi Ya Abati
I know I’m in great debt to you
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Snowflake
08-26-2009, 02:24 PM
Sweet and from the heart. MashaAllah :)
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Pen Marks
08-27-2009, 12:13 AM
Thanks :D
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al Amaanah
08-27-2009, 12:18 AM
:cry: jazaaki Allaho khair.
:w:
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Ansariyah
08-27-2009, 02:47 AM
So sweet *sniff*
May ALlah grant ur father & mine Jannah ameen.
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Na7lah
08-27-2009, 03:19 AM
Ameen ^
Its a really nice poem lil sis :shade:
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Pen Marks
09-06-2009, 01:19 AM
Arigato Oneesan :D
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Pen Marks
09-06-2009, 01:24 AM
I stand in my row
And wait for his go
And I go
And we go
We stand and we fall
and we all hear that call
but only some of us listen
only some of us hear
and we sit and we talk
of past sins and deeds
of places of people
of things we once knew
no more
And we hope and we pray
that this is the way
and kill the little voices in our heads
who say
that the path is hard and long
that the path is weak and wrong
that the path is weary and unsafe
that the path is old and unpaved
so we plug our ears
and we refuse to hear
that inner voice,
so loud and clear
and we say no
no
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cat eyes
09-06-2009, 01:54 AM
the first poem in the thread made me :'(
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Nice poem sister, really like it
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