A Besseech poem(Is it fine or needs further correction?)

[Bintulislam]

A Beseech



O God!My Merciful Lord!
Prevail Your love over Love of all,
With Your displeasure feared above,
Every mundane insecurity and juggernaut.
So I plea You not to let them interfere,
With my resolute heart
Leaving me to suffer,to fail,
In Your Sight,
Qualmish now,I ask You set me right!


My Lord!My Ever-forgiving God!
None but You know,
That with my Nafs I brawl to the best I can,
Day and Night
A mortally wounding fight
Alas!daily lost.


My God!My Benevolent Lord!
Help me!!Save my feeble soul,
Against the plots of my Nafs and Shaitan
Its too weak to fight them at its own
I don't want to be defeated and lose my Imaan
My blind-folded eyes and anemic heart
Aren't competent enough to resist,they'll fall apart
If You leave me at my own devices
I am only to fail and oddly to deal successfully with such a crisis


O Guardian!O Sustainer of all!
I've always found You there,
I've NEVER witnessed You not responding to my prayers,
You stand by me in happiness and despair,
Yet You know,that when I prostrate to You
Its mainly due to weakness and fear
And not because of my love for You or care

But I am sure You do as You are always there


So I beseech You O Merciful!!
As You've set an skeptic's happiness and serenity,
In his ignorance and crave for the material-all flam!
Put mine in acquiring Your pleasure
And vivify this heart's infarcted realm.


Bintulislam July'2010

[IbnAbdulHakim]

mashAllaah

i honestly expected to read the first paragraph and stop reading but you had me in a clinch and I am grateful for that.

I love how you articulated your struggle, felt like you spoke my daily feelings.



honestly, great poem sis


Assalamu Alaikum

[Snowflake]

MashaAllah beautiful ukhti Bintul Islam. Now here's the copyright symbol you need to insert at the end :)

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[Vigno]

Asalamu Alekum

Good to find someone writing poems here too, but honestly, I must say, your poem beats 10 of mine combined, mashallah.
However, if you allow me, I would like to quote one line, "And not because of my love for you-for me its intricate", what do you mean to say by that?

Jazaki Allah Khiir and may Allah aid you in writing more of such poems inshallah

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[Bintulislam]

mashAllaah

i honestly expected to read the first paragraph and stop reading but you had me in a clinch and I am grateful for that.

I love how you articulated your struggle, felt like you spoke my daily feelings.



honestly, great poem sis


Assalamu Alaikum

Wa-Alaikum-As-Salaam,

Thank you for the kind words brother even I know its NOT AT ALL perfect yet its honest and sincere may be that had you adhere to the poem.

thank you again!

[Bintulislam]

Asalamu Alekum

Good to find someone writing poems here too, but honestly, I must say, your poem beats 10 of mine combined, mashallah.
However, if you allow me, I would like to quote one line, "And not because of my love for you-for me its intricate", what do you mean to say by that?

Jazaki Allah Khiir and may Allah aid you in writing more of such poems inshallah

W/salaam!

Thank you so much for kind appreciation.Actually I was asking for your suggestions whether I should end that verse on care or intricate.But I've fixed it now.Thank you for your dua brother.

[Bintulislam]

MashaAllah beautiful ukhti Bintul Islam. Now here's the copyright symbol you need to insert at the end :)

©

Hold down Ctrl and Alt at the same time and press C Ctrl+Alt+C

JzkAllah khairun!sister :)You people made my day:) :),I tried editing my poem and put the copy right symbol as you've suggested but nothing appeared:confused:

[Snowflake]

Wa iyyaki sis :)

type the formula in Word then copy paste it here. If that doesn't work then copy paste it from my post lol.

[Bintulislam]

Wa iyyaki sis :)

type the formula in Word then copy paste it here. If that doesn't work then copy paste it from my post lol.

JazakAllah Khairun!!

[Snowflake]

Wa iyyaki : )