Deliquescing ♥

[SafaAuditore]

Back to poetry, but this time, it's Stewartified (my english teacher has affected my poetry in such ways that're unimaginable)
It's not supposed to be picture poem, BUT when i played with it and messed around it ended up looking really cool and almost like a picture...just use your imagination XD

It's called Deliquescing which means...something really cool which i already forgot but it was really pretty...
Enjoy!!
Copyrighted - don't try to steal it XD

Copyright © Serena G - 2010

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Deliquescing

I

Lay

In my

Crimson blood,

Waiting for death,

Bleeding life,

My skin

Dissolves,

My heart

Slips,

My spirit

Sinks.

I lift my head,

There you are,

Desert Eagle.

Heart ready,

Blood retiring,

Thoughts passing,

Memories flashing,

No one will ever know.

The metal

It flew,

It soared,

It was free,

Free to kill,

Mercilessly struck,

My heart gushed,

A large hole,

Inhuman, it was,

Alive, I wasn’t.

Darkness,

Fading,

Life.

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Feedback welcome n appreciated =)

P.S...if this isn't where i belongs..sorry..cause it's the closest thread to poetry O.O all that good stuff you guys used to have is gone =(

['Abd-al Latif]

:salamext:

Creative, good imagery. But a tad depressing.

[S.Belle]

del·i·quesce
intr.v. del·i·quesced, del·i·quesc·ing, del·i·quesc·es
1. a. To melt away.
b. To disappear as if by melting.

:thumbs_up very fitting

[Maryan0]

I like it. It's very dark.
Salam

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[siam]

could this also work?

I think its by Rabbia Al Basri?

In my soul
there is a temple, a shrine, a mosque, a church
where I kneel
prayer should bring us to an Altar
where no walls or names exist

Is there not a religion of love
where soverignity is illumined nothing
where ecstasy gets poured into itself and becomes lost

where the wing is fully alive but has no mind or body

In my soul
there is a temple, a shrine, a mosque a church
that dissolve
that dissolve in God

[itsjustme]

I like, dark, poetry generator? with personal experience?

[SafaAuditore]

haha thx mila XD
And of course it's depressing it's war. the dude just got shot O.O
itjustme - no one could write it from experience unless they writing from the grave lol XD

Thnx for ur feedback people, more to come =)

[Cabdullahi]

i might as well give up poetry after reading this

MashaALLAH

[Muezzin]

Moving to Creative Writing and Art.