salaam all... here is a poem i wrote for a project at the local youth centre, i need feedback, let me know what you think.... and that
Chorus
Cold cold world, feels so cold,
take another look,
just another crook,
yes,
cold cold world, feels so cold,
Verse 1
I'm living in this world feels so cold,
kids getting high, that news is old,
terror raids on our brothers homes,
no proof, just hatred in droves,
elite institutes crushing my hopes,
so I'm on the streets smoking dope,
family don’t care, its no wonder I feel so cold,
and I'm losing my grip on reality,
slowly slipping into insanity,
I'm focussing my energy into anger,
trying to speak out like Isa in the manger,
even my friends treat me like a stranger,
I spend my days in a haze,
trying to figure out why things are the way they are,
moving further and further away from Allah,
and I feel like I'm stuck in a ghetto,
walk on the streets and all I see is teenage ho’s
and BNP chasing me out,
hating on me beyond doubt,
making me feel like I don’t belong here
maybe I don’t, time to disappear,
why you staring at me in your dirty ways?
Full of racist displays,
Setting my soul ablaze,
Chorus
Cold cold world, feels so cold,
take another look,
just another crook,
yes,
cold cold world, feels so cold,
Verse 2
Don’t wanna open my eyes, for fear of what I might see,
So I raise my voice to Allah, might hear my plea,
From sunset, to every sunrise,
All I know is pain and womens thighs,
My life is full of sad goodbyes,
Getting chased by CIA’s and FBI’s
My hometown full of brothels,
Priests trying to warm me up with gospels,
cold world don’t wanna know who I am,
still following the path of the damned,
pain transcends and manifests in my soul,
truth is missing from the gaping hole,
am I'm stuck in a midsummer nights dream,
getting used to the pain I'm feeling,
society stabbed me in the back, with a smile to my face,
getting used to hates warm embrace,
my senses become numb,
the devil makes me succumb,
getting high on his forked tongue,
its about time the angels sung,
but the cold world hunting me with demons,
so I'm looking for the reasons,
Chorus
Cold cold world, feels so cold,
take another look,
just another crook,
yes,
cold cold world, feels so cold,
Verse 1
I'm living in this world feels so cold,
kids getting high, that news is old,
terror raids on our brothers homes,
no proof, just hatred in droves,
elite institutes crushing my hopes,
so I'm on the streets smoking dope,
family don’t care, its no wonder I feel so cold,
and I'm losing my grip on reality,
slowly slipping into insanity,
I'm focussing my energy into anger,
trying to speak out like Isa in the manger,
even my friends treat me like a stranger,
I spend my days in a haze,
trying to figure out why things are the way they are,
moving further and further away from Allah,
and I feel like I'm stuck in a ghetto,
walk on the streets and all I see is teenage ho’s
and BNP chasing me out,
hating on me beyond doubt,
making me feel like I don’t belong here
maybe I don’t, time to disappear,
why you staring at me in your dirty ways?
Full of racist displays,
Setting my soul ablaze,
Chorus
Cold cold world, feels so cold,
take another look,
just another crook,
yes,
cold cold world, feels so cold,
Verse 2
Don’t wanna open my eyes, for fear of what I might see,
So I raise my voice to Allah, might hear my plea,
From sunset, to every sunrise,
All I know is pain and womens thighs,
My life is full of sad goodbyes,
Getting chased by CIA’s and FBI’s
My hometown full of brothels,
Priests trying to warm me up with gospels,
cold world don’t wanna know who I am,
still following the path of the damned,
pain transcends and manifests in my soul,
truth is missing from the gaping hole,
am I'm stuck in a midsummer nights dream,
getting used to the pain I'm feeling,
society stabbed me in the back, with a smile to my face,
getting used to hates warm embrace,
my senses become numb,
the devil makes me succumb,
getting high on his forked tongue,
its about time the angels sung,
but the cold world hunting me with demons,
so I'm looking for the reasons,
