Juanito

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J.U.N.I.O.R said:
To this odd place i came
to a luxury i dreamt of coming to but it was incoherent with my thoughts,shame it was not the same


A new way of living meant things were far from easy
what is up?? everyone seems glumly and hurriedly busy and the behaviour's are sleazy


As a young innocent child there were things i shouldn't have been exposed to but nonetheless it has left its stain
dark like a moonless night on my brain


Peer pressure alongside the harmless tv box was more than enough to magnify
ugly and inactive thoughts in my mind....demonic propelled urges would then as a result multiply


''when i grow up i will rid myself from the clinging spores of society''
but the common saying above equates to i'll drop in the ocean and further persist that i would stay dry,i guess i lacked piety

because the earth is the ocean of fitna
it engulfs you in,whether black,white or yellow all are eligible ..it stretches out vile hands like the cartoon character edna

its a phenomena absolutely incredible
and through religion is the only way to stay impermeable

in this mental battlefield
the winner is he who sacrifice's that extra bit,and what a great recompense does it yield


but unfortunately we proceed to be arrogant and proceed to treacherously lie
despite knowing very well that our tongues,hands and feet will testify







i tried to keep it as short as i could
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That is fantastic, I think that your writting has just evolved, well done Junior and may Allah bless you and His peace be upon you
 
thanks i feel as if though this way of writing is more 'poem like' and i personally like my poems to be hiphop orientated and comparing it with the poem posted above i feel its chalk and cheese,maybe the hiphop flavoured poems hold an unorthodox style which is unusual to the many on this forum
 
J.U.N.I.O.R said:
thanks i feel as if though this way of writing is more 'poem like' and i personally like my poems to be hiphop orientated and comparing it with the poem posted above i feel its chalk and cheese,maybe the hiphop flavoured poems hold an unorthodox style which is unusual to the many on this forum
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Yeah bro thats good ou know what you like, your hiphop style is banging. But yor poetry is something truly special. i hope you find the correct channel to enable others to hear what you have to say. There are many writers around, some good some ok, but I am serious when saying you stand out from them all. Do you read other works or artists
 
its all about the ''appearance''
fashion extravagance
we've all been fed the 'celeb' potion
so lets roll camera,action!
the need to be by any means flawless
accompanied by the feel of complete freeness
mixing the two leads to a replete of blindness
so whats the insight?
simple! it is to ignite
dependencies and a tendency
on worldly things,then you suffer 'soul deficiency'
and self-sufficiency
girls with sculpting jeans
constantly spilling the beans
brainless, so no brain cells to figure
36....24...36 body figures
walking mannequins
worth nothing
silly sex objects
horizoning promiscuity the situation has become perplex
but well done to those with visual acuity
mental visual sharpness of 20/20
hurdles are plenty
despite that they've stuck to the boundary
life time is short so just wait few minutes more for your eternal bounty

this is a poem i did sometime back and this is the sort of style i like the most,i love to keep sentences short with powerful meanings behind each line that pack a punch
 

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