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    I used to dream of there being a category such as this (creative writing) and now there is one! yayyy!
    So here's another poem. It's called Immortal. Loaded with irony and weirdness.

    Hope u like it.

    __________________________________________________ __________________
    Immortal
    I’m deafened by your silence,
    Dazed by all the years,
    Numbed by your violence,
    And smothered by the tears.
    I’m looking for the key,
    But I won’t find it here,
    These chains no longer threaten me,
    And your eyes won’t cause me fear.
    You’ve broke my heart into pieces,
    And you strive to shatter my bones,
    You’ve shown me your evil faces,
    And lead me through deadly zones.
    And even though we got along,
    You shot my heart with a sole bullet
    But I’m standing right where I belong,
    And a petite bullet won’t end my spirit.
    I’d wish I hadn’t picked up the pen,
    But I wrote and I saw, the pictures of hell,
    With you, I know that’s where I’ve been,
    And with you, here is my farewell.
    Copyright © 2010 Serena G

    Feedback welcome and appreciated =)
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    Re: Immortal ♥

    it is beautifully written. you have a good writing style.
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    Re: Immortal ♥

    Beautiful. Masha Allah.
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    When there is nothing left but Allah that is when you find out that Allah is all you need.
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    Re: Immortal ♥

    Jazakallaahu Khaayr

    Great poem masha`Allaah

    amazing : D, share more please insha`Allaah
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    "Allah! La ilaha illa Huwa (none has the right to be worshipped but He), Al-Hayyul-Qayyum (the Ever Living, the One Who sustains and protects all that exists).".."[Al Qur'aan 3:2]
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    Re: Immortal ♥

    salaam

    Mash Allah

    peace
    Immortal ♥

    Do you think the pious don't sin?

    They merely:
    Veiled themselves and didn't flaunt it
    Sought forgiveness and didn't persist
    Took ownership of it and don't justify it
    And acted with excellence after they had erred - Ibn al-Qayyim
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