Cool rap sis, enjoyed readin it!Jazakillah khair for sharin.
My rap!!
assalamu alaikum
ME
Before:
I've tried to intro-duce
buh my names to great fo use
i jus dont want no abuse
coz the thugz jus cant refuse
yesterday im dyin , today am all youth
before a minute i was lyin but now im all truth
y'all niggaz all climbin, i jus jump ova tha roof
ignorants denying, when ya got all the best proof
i jus aint lying, so change yo views
im the tha top gangsta comin from the hood
walkin round sharp, spillin all ya blood
watever i do nobody else could
so ya better leave my zone
before i break ya bone
gna say ya shoulda known
before ya got me thrown
coz i dont need no tone
better yet i got my own
After:
Ima stick wit my deen
its tha truth it aint no dream
so dont mes wit tha xtreme
coz u jus messin wit the steam
you dont wanna be a legend
you jus want yo life to extend
allow me to comprehend
coz dumb aint no pretend
life or death? its gon' depend
wats ur choice? and we'll contend
it aint bout no crappy trend
its bout the deen in the end
its yo life watch wat yu spend
judgement day we'll all attend
try ur best or you'll descend
get what i mean and your MY-FRIEND
After the after:
I've tried to intro-duce
buh my names to great fo use
i jus dont want no abuse
coz the thugz jus cant refuse
yesterday im dyin , today am all youth
before a minute i was lyin but now im all truth
y'all niggaz all climbin, i jus jump ova tha roof
ignorants denying, when ya got all the best proof
i jus aint lying, so change yo views
im the tha top gangsta comin from the hood
walkin round sharp, spillin all ya blood
watever i do nobody else could
so ya better leave my zone
before i break ya bone
gna say ya shoulda known
before ya got me thrown
coz i dont need no tone
better yet i got my own
arent i very good? (no)
plus i change, i feel so proud of myself.
wa3alaikum assalam
Cool rap sis, enjoyed readin it!
aw cute sarcasm. shame its british
^Sarcasm?oh: I am offended.
lol sis, I can't help but laugh when I read your posts.
lol mayb its coz u dont get enough humor in the uk that im considered stand up comedien.
btw u betta be offended (aw jus messin bout that part...and ONLY that part)
Wow...like wow...like WOW!! MashaaAllaah!! That was heviiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii!!!!!!!!!
so ya better leave my zone
before i break ya bone- i like it
mashallah i loooooooooved it
Barakallah Fik!
Now everybody got the game figured out all wrong
I guess you never know what you got till its gone
I guess this is why I'm here and I cant come back home
And guess when I heard that when I was back home
Every interview I'm representing you making you proud
Reach for the stars so if you fall you land on a cloud
Jump in the crowd, spark you lighters, wave em around,
my bad...forgot some gangsta lines.
btw i hope yall noticed my point..
''so ya better leave my zone
before i break ya bone
gna say ya shoulda known
before ya got me thrown
coz i dont need no tone
better yet i got my own''
Very impressive
With a Gee to the aRrr to the freaking eight
Datz a classy Rap u jus made m8
Wid da rhymez dat are grippin and nevar borin
Keep rite on spamming on dis forum!
lol took me like three times to read you post slowly to get it (especially the first line!)format_quote Originally Posted by barney
that was tiight.
i got something better than all that i did before.
this one is important because this one is the one ima use for school.
we gotta do some poetry thing , but ima turn it to rap thing, and teacher gna lower my grade coz of spelling and grammar by like 70% but ima bring it up wit sum convincing
so just read and judge this one...
its not bout the fame, its not bout the glory
its bout my life, and this is my story
its war against peace, deen against life
not criminals, police, killin wit the knife
see what i mean, guns shootin
cops at the scene, nobody winnin
well this is just the personal
deal wit this first, dont gimme that bull
killin in the east, blamin the towers
beasts are released, blood showers
whinin bout osama, before u see ur country
dont gimme that drama, coz i disagree
so let fix up the old town now,
what ur gnna tell me is what i dont allow
Mix love with peace,
and the anger will release...
well? i think i shuda made it a bit more pimpin coz my teacher shud really learn to be a bit normal...
tight stuff yo!!!!!!!!! < ur lingokillin in the east, blamin the towers
beasts are released, blood showers
MashaAllaah good rap sis, enjoyed readin it! thanks for sharing.
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Jazakumallah khair...
lol.format_quote Originally Posted by - Serene -
tight stuff yo!!!!!!!!! < ur lingo
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what would you all grade it? Yo!
just that last one, what grade would you give it?
complete grade including grammar stuff nd all. cmon pretend to be lifeless for one second, be a strict english teacher and grade that pls
lol....Thanks for the entertainment sis
mashallah anymore?
grade it and we'll see, it was due like three days ago
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