Freestyle Poetry Thread

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J.U.N.I.O.R said:
6:am: i prayed after a struggle to wake up
getting ready... my face barely meets a touch of make up
tieing the scarf feeling cagey...
but proudly standing here bravely
on my right hand i have the pin
encouraging myself that if i do it..its a win win-
-situation, the summation is i will evade another sin
and of my lord im afraid and so i have conviction within
the whisperer comes when the time is critical
but my faith is strong tho, his effect is minimal
'take it off,if you want boys??'
NO! ,..thanks for the ploy
im happily covered and not indiscreet
cus i know in the jungle...what happens to exposed meat
Vulturous men have free access to see!!
im still standing here
from the rushed thoughts i say 'bismillah' to get clearer
one final look at the mirror
i see Beauty and a girl so sweet far from being dissolute and bitter
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Your good
 
JolieFleur said:
It's probably his accent, they were good masha'Allah :thumbs_up
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lol i kno, :-[ listened to it over nd over again really didnt get NOTHIN, then the second one only got "suicidal" imsad i can own him tho :coolious: nd u :coolious: coz i rap like them bludz up ther :D ...ok well jus the speed but not the rhymes coz ther rhymes are pointless air. :coolious:
 
truemuslim said:
lol i kno, :-[ listened to it over nd over again really didnt get NOTHIN, then the second one only got "suicidal" imsad i can own him tho :coolious: nd u :coolious: coz i rap like them bludz up ther :D ...ok well jus the speed but not the rhymes coz ther rhymes are pointless air. :coolious:
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LOL! The funny thing is, if we gave you and 10 more people the same rhyme to rap out, they'd all do it in a diff way and the beat would sound diff. Tried and tested, trust me :-[ so I guess everybody has their own unique way of doing it.

You should hear ma bro rap ;D
 
lol yeh well in freestylin the speed matters, the RHYMES matter, meaning to make it better u make the second last word rhyme too, or even better third! lol
neway to keep dis thread american gangstafied.......

And even though they say I cant blame myself
I still ain't forgave myself
For all the mistakes made on this road to wealth
I still ain't forgave myself
What I am today, I made myself
But I still ain't forgave myself
For anybody who ever wondered how I felt
I still ain't forgave myself



it was actually a continue to sumthin i was doin. but i dont fink i should even post that according to LI comments :D
 
truemuslim said:
lol i kno, :-[ listened to it over nd over again really didnt get NOTHIN, then the second one only got "suicidal" imsad i can own him tho :coolious: nd u :coolious: coz i rap like them bludz up ther :D ...ok well jus the speed but not the rhymes coz ther rhymes are pointless air. :coolious:
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:rollseyes
 
Mz said:
^wat u mean by voice? The flow or the actual tone?
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lol i mean in person, rappin, against,
like wat i jus posted up ther but rappin it ...out loud. not lame lil text.
lol
xcept the vocab part :-[ anyone'll own me in that, luckily that doesnt matter :coolious:
 
truemuslim said:
lol i mean in person, rappin, against,
like wat i jus posted up ther but rappin it ...out loud. not lame lil text.
lol
xcept the vocab part :-[ anyone'll own me in that, luckily that doesnt matter :coolious:
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allow me to re-itterate



:rollseyes
 
LoL

is there some hidden bashing going on here *scratch*

Hmm. Don't kill the thread insha'Allah. It wasnt going too bad ;D

And bro Mz...please post more :$ I really liked that other one.
 
she wants more
so i'll giv till im sore
my hearts poor misqeen
still on this deen
not takin it like a joke
like mr bean
stayin clean
to the end of the scene
upright
even keepin other brothers real keen

seepin ilm - knowledge
n i dnt even go college



i accidentally pressed cntrl z and acnt remember the rest but it was LONG


i liked it a bit too :(
 
she wants more
so i'll giv till im sore
my hearts poor misqeen
still on this deen
not takin it like a joke
like mr bean
stayin clean
to the end of the scene
upright
even keepin other brothers real keen

seepin ilm - knowledge
n i dnt even go college

coz im a fledgeling
aiming to be supreme
far more then a queen
swim in lands
u see only in dreams
it seems so far off but i'll b the crem da la cream
if u stand still here - i'll b that distant gleam over there
coz i dnt wanna freeze over here
freezin is what lets enemies in the rear
focussed and agile to the end
when im lying 6 foot under the sand




*it changed... other one was better !!*
 
Masha'Allah.

Not at the poem.

At you.

I liked the final 3 lines.

Argh you guys are good.

*reps*
 
Oh you edited it.

if u stand still here - i'll b that distant gleam over there
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That's fab. *smilessss* seriously I like it.

Sorry my comments are lame today. But yeh, I feel it.
 
truemuslim said:
lol i kno, :-[ listened to it over nd over again really didnt get NOTHIN, then the second one only got "suicidal" imsad i can own him tho :coolious: nd u :coolious: coz i rap like them bludz up ther :D ...ok well jus the speed but not the rhymes coz ther rhymes are pointless air. :coolious:
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:eek::hiding: looks like im going to stick with text format no more audio from me :D
 
I like the one before the mr. bean poem of yours Mz, you know the one on the page before that you said to read fast. Tried reading it real fast and it sounds good Masha'allah. At least it's rap with meaning. And yeah as sis Jolie mentioned what doesn't touch one's heart can touch other people. Like One man's rubbish is another man's treasure, but then that doesn't really REALLY relate here does it? :-\
Freestyles good, but am useless, I like reading other peoples ones.
 

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