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truemuslim said:
hmm, who am i really?
i dunno, so u tell me

ima tell ya wat i kno
and we can give it a go

ima 15 year useless slave
i work for allah for the faith he gave
nd no i dont live in a cave (:?)

but yeh, 4 bedrooms, workin jus fine yo
me nd my homies, i always got the time fo

then i found a word n started the rhymes
later on i had 10 lines
my bro saw it nd said "dis lyk mines"

i got so happy coz he the best
he like nas, tupac nd all the rest

his rhymes reach the sky coz they so high
yeh im bein honest here, ther aint no lie
non u can beat him vs in the rhymes
compared to his urs aint worth dimes (...sorry..bein honest:p )

i was interested in poetry coz the music
but now i quit music nd gota quit the new sick (poetry)

i really just hate it
i think i mean it
ima be thru it
dont need ur help to do it
i think u need to loose it
'nuff said bout the po-et
'nuff said bout the tal-et (talennt!)
coz ima get right thru it
and that u knew it

i think poetry is long gon
poetry aint strong
u can say that im wrong
but ima keep goin on

but thats jus one opinion
theres still above the million
each on a golden stallion
so lets se wat all up n' in :D


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hmm...

not meant fo offence when i said ur rhymes aint worth dimes compared to his, i were jus bein honest he like the big dude who if u get a compliment from him u should feel honooorrred! its like tupac complimenting soulja boys rap :rollseyes

he did se one of ibnabdulhakims rhymes once tho, nd said "dam thes are not bad"
which means u shud feel......honored
ur so lucky :p
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If you really like poetry you should study various poetic types in English.

Like read Beawulf, Shakespear, Poe, Dickenson, Milton etc.

you write good poetry but you seem to be fixed in a genre of kind of American hip hop sort of feel. Which is fine, like I said your poetry is good, however if you really want to be really go you might want to study these different routs so you can integrate more variety in your poetry.

I remember you have said you are from Yemen, is English your first language?

If not Beawulf and Shakespear would be very good for you to read, they are kind of the literary foundations of English so far as I know and they show how English works best in poetry. A friend of mine once said that English is "shallow" and that is true, compared to many language English is shallow and one must sail across it and the older English literary art can help you get a feel of the internal rythm of English which could help you with your poetry.

Nice Poem: )
 
wth1257 said:
If you really like poetry you should study various poetic types in English.

Like read Beawulf, Shakespear, Poe, Dickenson, Milton etc.

you write good poetry but you seem to be fixed in a genre of kind of American hip hop sort of feel. Which is fine, like I said your poetry is good, however if you really want to be really go you might want to study these different routs so you can integrate more variety in your poetry.

I remember you have said you are from Yemen, is English your first language?

If not Beawulf and Shakespear would be very good for you to read, they are kind of the literary foundations of English so far as I know and they show how English works best in poetry. A friend of mine once said that English is "shallow" and that is true, compared to many language English is shallow and one must sail across it and the older English literary art can help you get a feel of the internal rythm of English which could help you with your poetry.

Nice Poem: )
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Lol noway, shakespear, i hate him, everyone else, never even heard of em, never want to :D
i jus write freestyle, every single poem i've written i write it freestyle, nothings organized,

i dont really like poetry.
nd yeh arabic is my first language but my english is better :exhausted
poetry aint notin real,
but thanks :)
 
Yo, people need to detach themselves from "gangster" influences imo. Trust me sister, nothing good about gangs, or anything associated with them. They are not cool, they are about drugs, rape, murder and a lot of other horrible things.

I was worried with that poem anyway, about burying foes and gunnin and all that - you know, its whats wrong with the world. Too many people glorifying the gangster life - so you argue you don't mean anything wrong, but you are still on the wrong side of the battle.

Gangster"ism" = not where its at. Sadly, people get too influenced by R&B/rap, you know the haram music and stuff. I used to listen to such stuff when I was a teen and - growing up - I realise just how bad it is.

Don't feel offended sis, you are young, and it is my job, to lecture the youth!

So to sum up.

Ye I used to listen to that stuff when I was fifteen
But I have been cleansed Im living it clean
It had defined what I thought was cool and in
But as of now, I see it just contradicted the deen

The influences it spreads are of the devil
On the path to jannah, it has you falling behind a level
Like a disease it starts to affect your peers
Seriously, do you want this filth to be going into your siblings ears?

So, swallow your pride, and disengage yourself from the gangsta association
It does you no favours, really, theirs no negotiation
I won't lie Im amateur at the poem operation
But hopefully, I have made the message to your satisfaction :).
 
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SixTen said:
Yo, people need to detach themselves from "gangster" influences imo. Trust me sister, nothing good about gangs, or anything associated with them. They are not cool, they are about drugs, rape, murder and a lot of other horrible things.

I was worried with that poem anyway, about burying foes and gunnin and all that - you know, its whats wrong with the world. Too many people glorifying the gangster life - so you argue you don't mean anything wrong, but you are still on the wrong side of the battle.

Gangster"ism" = not where its at.
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you sayin "yo" was jus a bit... :muddlehea
Yeh i kno bro , i aint like that tho, im not "gangsta" , my brother was gettin reallly close to that, he'd go nd take paper roll it, nd burn the tip nd take a pic, looked like a cigar, or take dry qat nd mash it up nd say its weed, nothin real YET, then he got marrried, he's 18, nd he's livin happily ever after...........no money tho. :(
nd me, im jus not a "geek" or "ohioan" , my way of talkin, is ...detroitish, my way of typing, is txtish , my way of poeting, is gone-ish. :D

that buryin foes nd all is the ONE of the best poems i ever read , the way he rhymes is awesome, i jus hate wat he rhymes about. nd unfortunatly i cant talk to him to do better..........or else :skeleton:

nd btw its "gangstitity" not "gangsterism" :p


Jazakallah khair bro :-[
 

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