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In the darkness
I’m lying
The darkness
Is closing in
I don’t know where I am
Don’t know what to do

But you came in
Pulled me towards your light
And I lay there
In your arms
As you held me tight

And I felt it
Your heart beat
Beating hard and fast
As if jumping out of your chest
You thought I wouldn’t last

But I did
Yes, I did

I saw you
I saw you in my dreams
you were there
But it’s not what it seems

You stabbed me
You pierced me
With your little dart
While the droplets
Of sadness
Drained out of my heart

And it emptied
So empty
Yes, it did
So empty

Then you showed me
The right way
The right way I should go
And you taught me
You taught me
The things that I should know

And you whispered
In my ear
Some very good things
Good things
That matter
That my soul still sings…

And thank you
Yes, thank you
Thank you oh so much
I’ll remember
Your warm words
And your gentle touch…

:w:
 
A Looong Road

A Long Road

I walk on a road long and hard
I have a goal and a strong will
But will Allah give me strenghth and power
To be able to get across that hill?
*
I walk toward an end
An End that I do not see
But I'm not scared...why?
'Cause I know Allah's with me
*
I travel on remembering my Lord
And now I'm more stronger than i ever was before
I've submited my will and I'm happy content,
But forever I will be striving for more
*
I haven't gotten to the hard part yet
The road is still paved and smooth
The Dunya is a store-filled reststop
But I will not stop at Shaitan's booth

By: Me​
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Re: A Looong Road

There is a Hadith where it says not to be special because "Narrated by AbuSalmah, the prophet (pbuh) said "That a believer is simple and generous but the profiligate is decitful and ignoable."
 
Re: A Looong Road

Ma shaa' Allah , meaningful:thumbs_up
baraka Allahu feke ukhte
 
Re: A Looong Road

:sl: Thankyou for sharing that with us, it was very beautiful............:w:
 
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Comment and Critique plz

They say they want to speak
But they never listen or hear
They say they want to be unique
But they're just copycats, never sincere
They say that they're weak
But they never get stronger, are they too full of fear?
They say they want to think
But do they ever use their minds, do they ever adhere?

They stand, but they're dead with no growth
Not just the women, not just the men, but both
"Hold tight to the rope" they were told
But yet behold!
The rope dangles in front of their eyes
And still to lazy to grab the prize?
Some more ambitious are barely holding on
And if they tried harder, surely they would be drawn
High above where those lazy ones will never set their eyes
High above in the highest of paradise

I'm not sure what inspired it but yeh... :hmm: Let me know what yu think..
 
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It's a good poem!
 
Masha-Allah sis! thats really great, do you always write such things?
 
Masha'Alllah!!!

Minor correction: 3rd line, you said "the say", I believe you meant "they say"
 
try to avoid too much rhyme, I know that sounds counter intuitive, but you can only express so much hen constrained with rhyming. another thing would be try to be more subtle, hide the meanings by adding more layers, that way you'll reach access a wider range of emotions, imagery.

good attempt though , I disn't want to sound too negative but apparently failed =_= sorry, it's just that you can put words together, you do have a knack, just a little tweaking needed

~all the best.
 
The bones of ur poem are in excellent health, practice writting more and the flesh will follow
 
i really like your message

its deep !



i just wish i knew the flow you had in your mind - every poet has his own reading right