My freestyle...judge plz?

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lol sis.

translation:
i go lookin in the paper hopin to find good stuff
but then i just see things hatin on islam and arabs and muslims and all
half of the storys in the paper are aout us (muslims and arabs or 'terrorists')
just me (the arab or muslim)
yet again its bout me
and no matter what i do u cant set ur mind free from hatin on islam and muslims...and arabs

get it?
 
As Salaam Alaykum,

It is hard to freestyle, meaning rhyme words of the top (meaning without having it planned) and not be influenced by something you had heard, wether music, a'udhobillah, or qur'anic verses. All that needed to be said was 'sister it seems like you have let what you have heard become part of your rhyming' lets be nice to each other :)

Anyhow, I think it's best not to have such a thread as its just allowing shaytan to come back into our heads. I can imagine people disagreeing with me right now, so let me place my reasoning forth:


1. Those who feel they have kicked the habit of listening to music might be right, talking about it might not make them go back, but they are still disclosing something which should in honesty kinda be hidden right?


2. And even though those strong enough are not going to be going back to sinning, some of us are not that strong and so what is effectivly happening is people showing off a drink to an addict for lack of better terms, sometimes all it takes is to come to here and see that people listened to music etc, and although not right, it does effect some and shaytan uses that, or so it seems.

It could even be an avtar which make some remember the 'good' old days. hint hint ;)

Yall still disagree?

Eesa.
 
lol werent u banned bro? anyway actually it was ONLY the 'i feel misery' and all that part that was from remembering other stuff.. otherwise i made up the rest ON THE SPOT so it is freestyle i never have em planned its boring...
 
truemuslim said:
jazakallah bro... whado u suggest?
Click to expand...

ok for example lets take this line

'you still down way below
this is something u gotta know
remember ur lord
u'll getta great reward'


you could change it to

'your still way too down below,
this is something you gotta know,
you better remember your lord,
you'll get greater reward'

see, now the syllables rhyme to, and the flow is much better. do you get what im saying?
 
ah yeah thats better... much better...jazakallah.. i will need that
:w:

p.s. ur rhymes are amaaazing in ur thread
 
I think they're brilliant. :)

Mashaa'Allah not only do you have talent, but you are using it for the right purpose!
 
lol jazakallah... ima write one bout war and do it for my school poem thing and i better getta 100% lol.. comin up
 

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