From a young ageSis its a really good idea if you start off with some how mentioning the degree you're applying for, so that the application readers can be informed of your chioce from the very beginning rather than having to figure it out themselves. You may feel you're being explicit which is unnecessary as they are already aware of your subject chioce, however mentioning it in your personal statement is better, so that even you can have a systematic structure to your statement??,I have enjoyed reading & (try not to use these, its better if you actually use the word 'and') swimming. Painting is another hobby which involves great care,attention to detail,a deal of concentration & satisfaction in having a final product I can be proud of. Just like the great care,coordination & attention (you've mentioned these descriptions twice, maybe you could re arrange the sentence to say all those things without repeating the same words again? that way you can add other words you may have missed out??) to detail exercised in pharmacology. (btw, masha'Allah i love this point though) I've always wanted to pursue a career in healthcare. I wanted (here maybe you could say 'I WANT' rather than 'WANTED' as it seems like it was something you've wanted, and don't anymore as its in the past tense?? try not to say things about your future aspirations using the past, rather 'presently' or 'want to' 'will' etc..??) a career that would make a difference to peoples lives,a career where I could do my part and contribute to society. It wasn't until I nurtured these crafts that my love for pharmacology became apparent & I knew this was the perfect career for me. (masha'Allah)
My mother,also in the healthcare profession,has showed me that pharmacy is not only a profession but at the very frontline of healthcare & a life in science.This has fuelled my interest in pharmacy.
The subjects that I have taken,biology & chemistry have aided me to fulfil my dream & take on pharmacy as a career. (think about rewording this sentence, maybe something like: "The subjects that I have taken,biology ...have contributed in the fulfillment of my dream and further increased my interest to take on a career in pharmacy." (???))
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I find chemistry an exciting subject,dealing with substances and watching chemical reactions occur.I can carry out experiments effectively & obtain good results.I have great passion for biology,the human body is amazing.Skills in maths is required for a career in pharmacy.My maths skills include using numbers,fractions & percentages to solve problems.Although I have not studied maths at A-level,I am a keen person who will strive to overcome a challenge & will always perform to the best of my abilities.
My biomedical degree has increased my knowledge upon many disciplines such as clinical biochemistry, immunology & cellular pathology.It has provided me with the knowledge of the human body in sickness and health along with developing key skills & other attributes.This has significantly provided me with the basis for a career in the pharmaceutical industry.Carrying out project work in university has brought out my initiative,persistence & organisational skills & I have great confidence that I will benefit the community.
My problem solving and communication skills are excellent.I can communicate effectively & can apply methods & subject knowledge accurately & carefully to a given problem.This can be applied to the pharmacy degree.
Working effectively with others within a group naturally to me. (maybe re read this sentence? it seems like you've missed a word out? or its just incomplete?)This probably stems from my friendly and approachable personality & as a result I can build strong relationships within a team.These skills can be valuable in this career as pharmacists work alongside a team of doctors,nurses & physiotherapists.My listening skills are good,I listen attentively to what a person is saying and show understanding towards them,a skill which is required as a pharmacist as they need to listen to patient issues.I can work well under pressure and can easily meet deadlines.
My passion for pharmacy prompted me to find a job within a community pharmacy at a local Tesco store.I enjoyed working here,observing local pharmacists helping people daily and what a great difference it made to them.The job gave me an opportunity to gain and develop many skills such as team work,organisation & communication skills.It entailed me to deal with customers and consumer problems.Together,these skills will be valuable in a pharmacy career.Although my first language is English,my bilingual skills of being able to fluently speak Urdu & Gujarati will prove to be beneficial for me when working amongst a community whose mother tongue is not English.In addition i have always enjoyed cooking from a young age the way you can use various ingredients to make a beautiful dish.It can easily be compared to the art of pharmacy where different elements are used to make a medicinal compound,where if strawberry flavoured not only tastes good,but cures the ailment too!
Your university will foster all my talents & allow me to study pharmacy which will not only give me an opportunity to give something back to the community but will give me a rewarding career where both myself and other individuals will benefit. (masha'Allah)
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