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'shun'







silly assumptions
make a misconception
despite clear corrections
still no redemption
ill-preparation
malicious implications
a kafirs insinuation
mislabeling a big portion
with a small portion
media distortion
puppet politicians
both left and right sections
creators of tension
example?, common infliction
'women forced to a hijab application'
no it prevents intrusion
we keep modest,enjoy ur! unlawful seduction
like i said ^ given explanation
still no redemption
still Perpetration
we need to stay as a nation
soul purification
fight against inhibition
-now!!!!, cant wait for jesus descension
its about time this oppression
we shun
 
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mashallah kwl poem.......unfortunatly i wasnt able to understand notin xcept 2 lines (about) :mmokay:
but yeh that doesnt matter wat does matter is how many rhymes u get, nd how good they rhymes, how good the sylabuls r (spelld wrong) nnnd of course, the levelity of gangstitity. :D so yeh i thnk its awesome :D

edit: o yeh nd also the color nd size is sooooo just a bit :blind:

edit 2: nvrmind, u've pimped it out :D
 
Masha'alla bro that's real good!
I'd rep you but apparently I've repped too many people in the past 24 hours :muddlehea
 
:thumbs_up that was good MashaAllah, ur only saying its bad so we say its good and then u say no and then we say yes and then theres a fight :D
 
i think its abit too hard to understand,should of made it abit simpler
 
^^ No bro, it's alright as it is!
How would you attempt to simplify it?
 
^ dnt change ur poetry for these feeshers, poetries about expressing yourself :D

if you understand it, and feel something from reading it, then its yours bro! its a reference into your past and into your feelings

you can look back on it, but DONT change it :)
 
lol i could barely understand it but it was still owning coz i was able to see the message in ther. mashallah! :(
 
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MashaAllaah nice.

Some advice; When rhyming, put the same sounding rhymes together, e.g. application, nation, preparation

and

redemption, descension, tension

etc.

Hope that didn't offend you :X
 
huh? why would it offend me to take advice from a kind sister and an older poet that knows her stuff well
 

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