UnWanted

Keep it up sis. This gets better and better.
I wrote a piece called 'Plague of War' for my Original Writing English coursework and I got an A*. Mabey I'll post that up on my own thread.
 
Salam,
It's very good. Did you mean for the first paragraph to all have long sentences? Maybe mix it up a little...
 
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JazakAllah ukhti.
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Angel said:
woow wat can i say sis ,u got a gift masha allah.
and u share it with others thats more dan enough , cherish it well sis not every one can write as well as u ,and put such feelings and describtions to a story
masha allah:)

lookin forward to chapter 2:statisfie
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It does? Well, I sure am glad to be told that.:)
Looking forward to your story soon.inshAllah.
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Ayesha Rana said:
Keep it up sis. This gets better and better.
I wrote a piece called 'Plague of War' for my Original Writing English coursework and I got an A*. Mabey I'll post that up on my own thread.
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JazakAllah. Yes, the whole story is to be based on long and descriptive sentences.
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mlsh27 said:
Salam,
It's very good. Did you mean for the first paragraph to all have long sentences? Maybe mix it up a little...
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i was waitin for it aswell!

i think i'll relax with my story and enjoy ameeratul sis's story inshaAllah :)
 
ass salaamu alaykum,

your gonna quit it :ooh:

*waiting for ameera's second part*
 
amirah_87 said:
ass salaamu alaykum,

your gonna quit it :ooh:

*waiting for ameera's second part*
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No, I did not say I were to quit it. I simply said,'in good time'.
I am trying to think of a strong twist and other factors whilst writing a story.
So, please, just have a little more patience.inshAllah.
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course not!!! my stories gnna b something amazing INSHAALLAH, i hope to teach a lot of what i've learnt from my story. So im tryin to gather my thoughts :D


MAIN AIM: To learn :D
 
ass salaamu alaykum,

that's good to hear mashaAllah :thumbs_up

keep up the good work :)
 
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(This story seems to be getting worse. Sorry readers, I am trying my best).





Chapter Two ​
It was October and in the early mornings of the rather stormy day, the people of Mr. Dines household were abashed at the distressing news of Mr. Dines’ death. He had eaten well the night before and drunk a good number of cigars. The following morning he had settled at the fireplace with a cup of tea and a short time later had snoozed to sleep.
‘I tell you saw, I heard the noise.’ Mrs. Tuner spoke. Her face reddened as she used the term ‘noise.’
‘What do you mean when you say, noise?’ Frederick enquired.
Mrs. Turner lowered her gaze to her hands that were now resting below her belly, then looked up at Frederick as she spoke. ‘Mr. Dines were snoring Sir.’
Fredericks’ lips twitched as he hoped to laugh at the modesty of such an old lady. But, the aghast news of his father took away the twitch.
‘I entered the study to take away Mr. Dines’ cutlery as I knew that Mr. Dines sips his tea rather quickly so as to continue with his paper work. I noticed that the noise had gone and it only seemed right to see if Mr. Dine were…’, her eyes filled with tears.
Frederick looked softly at Mrs.Turner, drew a tissue from his pocket and handed it to her. He felt heartbroken for the lady as, unlike the other house maids, she too was not aware that Mr. Dines was expected by doctors, to die very soon. The doctors had told Mr. Dines and therefore Mr. Dines informed Frederick that he were not able to battle with the damaged lung with the extensive smoking. Mr. Dines was informed to cut down the number of cigars but due to his ignorance, he died.
‘I placed my finger to his nose and I noticed there were no breathing, there was no warmth. I am sorry sir, but I had to,’ she looked pleadingly to Frederick. Fredrick in turn nodded his head to re assure her she was not in trouble.
‘What next Mrs. Turner?’
 
Ameeratul Layl said:
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Hmm, yes, if you say so.
JazakAllah for your comments everyone.
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siriely bro amazed is right
its great i dont see any difference from ur other great writen stories sis :)
i juz fink ur getting abit nervy hehhe ;D but dont worry ur stories will always be good sis masha allah
 
cool stories Ameeratul they are realy nice
do u wana be a writer or is writing ur hoby cuz ur realy good:statisfie
 
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A bit nervy? Surely you can't blame me. :statisfie And jazakAllah for the kind words, they really are helping.:)


Angel said:
siriely bro amazed is right
its great i dont see any difference from ur other great writen stories sis :)
i juz fink ur getting abit nervy hehhe ;D but dont worry ur stories will always be good sis masha allah
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Well, thank you Ashley.
No, I would like to become Physicist, God willing. Indeed something completely different to a writer. Its good? Well, thank you. I am glad you enjoy my stories.:)

Peace.

Ashley said:
cool stories Ameeratul they are realy nice
do u wana be a writer or is writing ur hoby cuz ur realy good
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do u have to write islamic stories or can it be any stories
cuz i love writing and reading alot and i was thinking if u can write any story i might share one with u lot:)
 
Ashley said:
do u have to write islamic stories or can it be any stories
cuz i love writing and reading alot and i was thinking if u can write any story i might share one with u lot:)
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As long as it has no sexaul parts to it, then it should be okay.God willing.
This story (unwanted) is not an 'islamic' story.

Peace
 

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