6:am: i prayed after a struggle to wake up
getting ready... my face barely meets a touch of make up
tieing the scarf feeling cagey...
but proudly standing here bravely
on my right hand i have the pin
encouraging myself that if i do it..its a win win-
-situation, the summation is i will evade another sin
and of my lord im afraid and so i have conviction within
the whisperer comes when the time is critical
but my faith is strong tho, his effect is minimal
'take it off,if you want boys??'
NO! ,..thanks for the ploy
im happily covered and not indiscreet
cus i know in the jungle...what happens to exposed meat
Vulturous men have free access to see!!
im still standing here
from the rushed thoughts i say 'bismillah' to get clearer
one final look at the mirror
i see Beauty and a girl so sweet far from being dissolute and bitter
Last edited by Cabdullahi; 10-21-2008 at 07:29 AM.
^ now that is what i call top notch,well done sister yannie
thnnks.
ur my inspiration Junior
the one n only lyrical warrior
can spit rhymes bout the future
makes reality seem so nearer
despite the fact we're behind a computeeer
I know its within ur naturrr
so I am just a capturer
of ur own talent, a regular!
*thats it i will stop*
Learn Patience from Asiyah, Loyalty from Khadijah, Sincerity from Aisha and Steadfastness from Fatima.
yo check it,they watch me
but they cant catch me
im slick ahead of time got my boots laced
just in the nick of time escaped
not brainsick ,nor debased
my every move street cameras observe
and preserve-
private life disclosure
exposure
Id cards
identity thwart
equanimity
they cant knock me
super vigilance
in abundance
big beard
automatically feared
another brother got smeared
how many more, its a big bother
'big brother',f**ck a new world order
illicit temptations they failed to tame me
mentally too strong,now they wanna frame me
guantanamo is where they wanna take me
that place is always ready
but i aint crazy-
to be thrown in a booby hatch
forget talking! gloves off i'm going to wrestle! in this boxing match
till my vessels stop functioning-life latch
they dont understand..,islam is my relgion and-
revolution is my satisfaction
Last edited by Cabdullahi; 10-25-2008 at 05:14 PM.
a lotta people waffling so ima waffle to
a lotta people baffling so ima baffle you
if ur still readin
ur head must be bleadin
cant u tell this rhyme is seepin
ur braincells are leakin
ur gettin dumber yet u jus keep readin
i dont get ya dont u get this is waffle?
do u like this? got a taste to get baffled?
ok then i'll talk some sense
i prefer rhymes that get a bit tense
i prefer rhymes wiv a bit of meaning
rhymes which raise my emaan 2 the ceiling
so if ur rhymes dont do that 4 me
i'd stop readin coz its a tragedy
-
My tears testify that i have a heart
yet i feel me and shaytan never part
-
a lotta people waffling so ima waffle to
a lotta people baffling so ima baffle you
if ur still readin
ur head must be bleadin
cant u tell this rhyme is seepin
ur braincells are leakin
ur gettin dumber yet u jus keep readin
i dont get ya dont u get this is waffle?
do u like this? got a taste to get baffled?
ok then i'll talk some sense
i prefer rhymes that get a bit tense
i prefer rhymes wiv a bit of meaning
rhymes which raise my emaan 2 the ceiling
so if ur rhymes dont do that 4 me
i'd stop readin coz its a tragedy
a lotta people waffling so ima waffle to
a lotta people baffling so ima baffle you
if ur still readin
ur head must be bleadin
cant u tell this rhyme is seepin
ur braincells are leakin
ur gettin dumber yet u jus keep readin
i dont get ya dont u get this is waffle?
do u like this? got a taste to get baffled?
ok then i'll talk some sense
i prefer rhymes that get a bit tense
i prefer rhymes wiv a bit of meaning
rhymes which raise my emaan 2 the ceiling
so if ur rhymes dont do that 4 me
i'd stop readin coz its a tragedy
lol that waz crazy
Learn silence as you have learned speech.
Speech will guide you, and silence will protect you.
yo check it,they watch me
but they cant catch me
im slick ahead of time got my boots laced
just in the nick of time escaped
not brainsick ,nor debased
my every move street cameras observe
and preserve-
private life disclosure
exposure
Id cards
identity thwart
equanimity
they cant knock me
super vigilance
in abundance
big beard
automatically feared
another brother got smeared
how many more, its a big bother
'big brother',f**ck a new world order
illicit temptations they failed to tame me
mentally too strong,now they wanna frame me
guantanamo is where they wanna take me
that place is always ready
but i aint crazy-
to be thrown in a booby hatch
forget talking! gloves off i'm going to wrestle! in this boxing match
till my vessels stop functioning-life latch
they dont understand..,islam is my relgion and-
revolution is my satisfaction
Good stuff bro!
Learn Patience from Asiyah, Loyalty from Khadijah, Sincerity from Aisha and Steadfastness from Fatima.
a lotta people waffling so ima waffle to
a lotta people baffling so ima baffle you
if ur still readin ur head must be bleadin
cant u tell this rhyme is seepin ur braincells are leakin
ur gettin dumber yet u jus keep readin
i dont get ya dont u get this is waffle?
do u like this? got a taste to get baffled?
ok then i'll talk some sense
i prefer rhymes that get a bit tense
i prefer rhymes wiv a bit of meaning
rhymes which raise my emaan 2 the ceiling
so if ur rhymes dont do that 4 me
i'd stop readin coz its a tragedy
I didn't want my head to bleed, nor any brain cells to leak. And I'm not particularly fond of getting any dumber. Thus, I stopped reading after the last bold line.
Abdau bil hamdulillahi rabbil alameen,
Then protest at the abuse of a thread I'm witnessing,
I've seen the scene of hopes and dreams,
Where ikhlas is told khalas and riya is brought in!
Look at what I mean, verily intention is a hard thing to control,
Harder with people of the opposite gender watchin your poetry show,
So I call for, total control, and have this in the single gender zone.
The path is long but I hope we meet,
After the grave and the Day, in paradise in bliss upon a reclined seat.
A traveler traveling - travelled from shirk to tawheed,
If I'm remembered for anything - let it be the Mercy I seek.
I agree freestyle can sound kool. I still dont see the difference between that and normal poetry though since it's not as though I sit down with my poems and make sure every single word is grammatically correct and edit each line like a thousand times to make it sound better. Isnt it the same as freestyle?
But anyway, main point is that I dont see why you have to use foul language in ur rhymes. It just defeats the purpose of beauty in poetry and taking a lesson from it. If I read something that sounds like it's been written on the streets, ima have a hard time relating to it.
Seriously, rhymes with that kind of theme and swear words, are just totally innapropriate. It just reminds me of, very bad people, I knew back in the days.
Well what's the point of it being open? So we can be a 'tool of the devil'.
Yes, I am familar with the word nigga, and I know it is used all the time between black poeple, or should I say negroes, or niggas, and believe it or not some of my friends use it, woohooo! Maybe you should assume less and ask more.
How do you know I am not more 'gangsta' than you? And all that rubbish.
Now, blood, is not a swear word, but I cant imagine use going upto an imam and saying 'Salam Alaykum BLOOD, when you kickin salatul ishaa off my nigga, cos I need to catch some zzzz and all'
I also don't think many would go to respectable members of the community and say 'whats up my ******, how are ya mum?'
Anyhow, I'll leave this thread.
The path is long but I hope we meet,
After the grave and the Day, in paradise in bliss upon a reclined seat.
A traveler traveling - travelled from shirk to tawheed,
If I'm remembered for anything - let it be the Mercy I seek.
The Prophet (saws) said: If the belly of one of you were to be filled with pus that corrodes it, it would be better then him being filled with poetry"
[Related by Muslim (2258)]
And verily for everything that a slave loses there is a substitute, but the one who loses Allah will never find anything to replace Him.” [Related by Ibn al-Qayyim in ad-Dâ' wad-Dawâ Fasl 49]
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masha'Allah. What a waste of a minute. Quite kool
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